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A Drabble : Musings of a Prisoner – (Blog-a-ton 6)

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 6; the sixth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.

A Drabble is an extremely short work of fiction exactly one hundred words in length. The purpose of the drabble is brevity and to express interesting and meaningful ideas in an extremely confined space.

“Last few days!” he thought, as he captured the reds and pinks of his life!

A life, he was sometimes proud of, but mostly full of regrets.

That night in a drunken state, he had raped his daughter! Her pleas and cries didn’t penetrate him. Later, the police woke him and he saw her lifeless body.

“How could I?” echoes incessantly in his ears, still.
Twelve years in this penitentiary, no peace, still.

He thought of his shining career… the fame, fans, money and everything it could buy.

He smiled sardonically, success has a thousand fathers. Defeat is an orphan.

PS : Here, Red signifies the evil and Pink symbolizes the appreciation, admiration,  health, love, joy in our lives.

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70 Responses

  1. Drabble,,a new forem of writing I learnt today..thank you..I must try that some time…ur story was nice too although, quite disturbing…
    keep writing
    🙂

  2. new to this concept of drabble. NIce concept what about the man writing in that pic what part he has to play there. The red and pink interpretation was nice though.

  3. Another new format….well I think Drabble is here to stay, about the story I must say it is a disturbing one. Keeping your feet on the ground is very important if u bcome famous…Kinda reminds me of Hank from Californication…gr8 one

    Shahid

  4. wow! Loved the idea of using red and pink instead of the usual black and white moments 🙂

    Drabble sounds like a tempting format of fiction writing. I need to give it a try some time.

    Fantastic plot in limited words, you’ve captured all details in real few words.

    Keep up the wonderful work Shilpa.

    Cheers!!

  5. Drabble sounds like another format. I am not sure whether a writer should limit her/himself to the number of words. The satisfaction of expressing oneself (thought lengthy write up would fetch less readers, I agree) is important too. It seems that you can express it in limited words, so it sounds good.

  6. “reds and pinks”

    “success has 1000 fathers, defeat is an orphan”..

    Story-telling at its best! Wonderful Shilpa. You’ve exceeded any expectations I had whatsoever before I started reading this post.

    Good Luck. Hats Off madame 🙂

    –rohitha (in a hurry, haven’t logged on to my blogger account)

  7. waaah waah waah…kya baat hai… lovely…:D

    Btw nice idea of drabble, i wrote the same didn’t know its a drabble…will add the two lines there…:D

  8. @ narendra : Don’t cry, Narendra! Please don’t!! 😀

    You need to ask Madhu, as to what he has understood! 😀

    @ Saurabh : There is a reference to the thinker with the pen in the first line itself, Saurabh!

    A fiction in a 100 words is a Drabble!! 🙂

  9. @ pushpee : Happy to help!! 😀

    Oh, yes, you must try it too!! Would love to see your expression in 100 words! All the very best for that! 🙂

    Thanks for your feedback! 🙂

  10. @ Megha : Thanks Megha!

    Yeah, it could be sad smile too or even a weary smile. But this character chose to smile sardonically! 🙂

    @ vEnKy : Am glad you liked the concept of a Drabble and the interpretation, Venky! 🙂

    This is the story of that man!!

  11. @ Shahid : Yeah, I was looking for different types of micro-fiction and am glad I found this!

    Right you are, with name, fame and money lots of unwanted baggage accompany too. Sports, show business etc has lots of examples of these sad turn of events!

    I haven’t seen Californication! 🙁

    Thanks! 🙂

  12. @ Chatterbox : Thanks CB! Am glad you liked the interpretation! And thanks a bunch for your kind words!

    Surely you must dabble into drabble (seriously though…liked the dabble drabble rhyming! :p)

    Cheers 🙂

  13. @ Subhayan : Thanks a lot, Subhayan! You are kind with words! 🙂

    @ aativas : Agree with your view point. But I like micro-fiction and also it is more challenging!

    And honestly, I have a little less patience with long stories! :p

  14. @ the schmuck : Thanks a lot, sweetie!! 🙂

    @ Gyanban : Thks, am glad you like it! 🙂

    @ Shahid : Thanks…will check this TV series, whenever possible! 🙂

  15. Stunning piece, dear Shilpa! That’s it!!!

    Just tried to ‘drabble’ my response… ;))

    I’m reminded of our very own age-old Hindi saying – “Dekhan me chhote lagein, ghaav karein gambheer”. 🙂

    You’ve given dear Vipul a novel idea to mull over – How about a “DRABBLE-A-PIE”…!!! ;)))

    Congrats on the good innovation in indiblogging, dear Shilpa! Cheers! 🙂

    SHRINATH VASHISHTHA
    Port Blair.
    Andaman & Nicobar Islands (India).

  16. Drabble! This is a new form I have seen and I liked it very much! The way you have written it is very gripping! You have described the life really differentely from the perspective of the prisoner! I fell in love with the sentence-success has a thousand fathers. Defeat is an orphan.
    You are in my story thos time…So I will like to see your reaction on it! I hope you will not get angry with me!!

  17. @ Shrinath : Thank you so much!! 🙂

    Am glad you liked this tale!

    Drabble-a-pie!! Hmm…sounds tempting, hope there are takes for this!!

    Cheers 🙂

    @ Karthik : Thank you Karthik! 🙂

    Cheers 🙂

  18. @ Nikhil Patokar : Thanks Nikhil! 🙂

    @ Nethra : Thanks Nethra, am glad you liked it!

    Oh yes, its terrible and horrible!! 🙁

    @ pra : Thanks a lot Pra for your feedback. Am glad you liked this new form of micro-fiction. You must try it too! 🙂

    Your story…you have some imagination, lady!! Cool! 🙂

    Angry?? I liked my role!! Thanks a lot for making me a part of your story!!

    Cheers 🙂

  19. Shilpa,
    I am sorry for being late on the wagon, but I really feel sad for being late. This post is simply awesome!
    Nice interpretation (it’s only after you others have started using the colour theory!) and also an utterly devastating tale!

    Hats off to you!

  20. What can i say about my guru of micro-fictions? Its from u I learnt the art of writing 55-Fictions! And now its drabble! ‘What an idea Madam-ji’

    The interpretation of the picture was awesome shilpz! Really superb!

  21. Drabble is something I feel is new to me! Thanks for educating people like me in your first para! The story comes like a grudge to me.. The plot is extremely sensitive and serious! Sad that such incidents do happen! Good one Shilpa!

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  23. @ Tanushree : Hi Tanushree!

    Thank you and your post is very well written. Liked it! Keep expressing!!

    Cheers 🙂

    @ pawan : I believe in “better late than never”. So, good to see you here!

    Am glad that you liked it!
    Cheers 🙂

  24. @ JustAnother : Yeah it is! Thanks and welcome on this space.

    @ Shruti : 🙂

    Am glad you liked the picture interpretation! Thanks. 🙂

    @ Makk : Thank you, Makk. 🙂

  25. @ neeraj : Yeah, Drabble is another form of micro-fiction.

    It is truly sad but they do exist! 🙁

    Thanks 🙂

    @ geeta : Thank you Geeta! 🙂

    @ Jaunty anima: 🙂 🙂

    Thank you so much, JA! Am glad you liked it!! 🙂

    Cheers 🙂

  26. @ dilontherocks : Thank you!! 🙂

    @ Shas : Thank you, Shas!! Yes, you should try it too!

    Cheers 🙂

    @ Mahesh Kalaal : Came across this Drabble form of micro-fiction, just the other day!!

    So tried my hands on it! 🙂

    @ Vipul Grover : Yeah, when 55 is toooo less, move to Drabble! 😀

  27. Move away 55F , 2010 is for drabble 😉

    I liked the short, crisp and strong story. But frankly somehow as an entry for article based on the story , it did not jell well (it’s just my opinion, don’t mind) neverthless, I loved the story without connecting it with the image.

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