A Drabble : Musings of a Prisoner – (Blog-a-ton 6)
This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 6; the sixth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.
A Drabble is an extremely short work of fiction exactly one hundred words in length. The purpose of the drabble is brevity and to express interesting and meaningful ideas in an extremely confined space.
“Last few days!” he thought, as he captured the reds and pinks of his life!
A life, he was sometimes proud of, but mostly full of regrets.
That night in a drunken state, he had raped his daughter! Her pleas and cries didn’t penetrate him. Later, the police woke him and he saw her lifeless body.
“How could I?” echoes incessantly in his ears, still.
Twelve years in this penitentiary, no peace, still.
He thought of his shining career… the fame, fans, money and everything it could buy.
He smiled sardonically, success has a thousand fathers. Defeat is an orphan.
PS : Here, Red signifies the evil and Pink symbolizes the appreciation, admiration, health, love, joy in our lives.
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January 8, 2010 7:38 pm|
Kya baat hai Shilpa ji. Short and powerful. Very well done.
Smiling at your interpretation of Red and Pink. Tussi great ho ! ;-).
Why ? You will know ..
January 8, 2010 7:43 pm|
Shilpa, very well written… 🙂
January 8, 2010 7:54 pm|
i am lost shilpa di…. 🙁
what did Madhu understand that i dint 🙁 🙁
*cries for being unable to follow*
January 8, 2010 8:05 pm|
oye! No reference to the Thinker with the Pen?
Unexpected! but nice!
Drabble? So this is wat you call it when you exceed 55 words…
January 8, 2010 8:28 pm|
Drabble,,a new forem of writing I learnt today..thank you..I must try that some time…ur story was nice too although, quite disturbing…
January 8, 2010 8:51 pm|
Nice. Powerful in such a less words, but didnt get ..last laugh sardonically ?, or sadness ?
January 9, 2010 2:18 am|
new to this concept of drabble. NIce concept what about the man writing in that pic what part he has to play there. The red and pink interpretation was nice though.
January 9, 2010 2:39 am|
Another new format….well I think Drabble is here to stay, about the story I must say it is a disturbing one. Keeping your feet on the ground is very important if u bcome famous…Kinda reminds me of Hank from Californication…gr8 one
January 9, 2010 3:05 am|
wow! Loved the idea of using red and pink instead of the usual black and white moments 🙂
Drabble sounds like a tempting format of fiction writing. I need to give it a try some time.
Fantastic plot in limited words, you’ve captured all details in real few words.
Keep up the wonderful work Shilpa.
January 9, 2010 5:37 am|
you know what? you ve actually mastered the art of nano-stories!
January 9, 2010 6:08 am|
Drabble sounds like another format. I am not sure whether a writer should limit her/himself to the number of words. The satisfaction of expressing oneself (thought lengthy write up would fetch less readers, I agree) is important too. It seems that you can express it in limited words, so it sounds good.
January 9, 2010 6:48 am|
new format… cool 🙂
very beautifully penned and expressed…
January 9, 2010 6:53 am|
Personally I am not a huge fan of short writing but this one was very good.
January 9, 2010 7:22 am|
“reds and pinks”
“success has 1000 fathers, defeat is an orphan”..
Story-telling at its best! Wonderful Shilpa. You’ve exceeded any expectations I had whatsoever before I started reading this post.
Good Luck. Hats Off madame 🙂
–rohitha (in a hurry, haven’t logged on to my blogger account)
January 9, 2010 7:52 am|
Loved your narration…
“success has a thousand fathers. Defeat is an orphan.”
How very true. Liked this piece 🙂
January 9, 2010 9:04 am|
“Success has a thousand fathers” – how true. Liked the way you have interpreted the image.
January 9, 2010 9:14 am|
waaah waah waah…kya baat hai… lovely…:D
Btw nice idea of drabble, i wrote the same didn’t know its a drabble…will add the two lines there…:D
January 9, 2010 9:21 am|
The first time I came across fiction 55 was on your blog… and now a drabble… it looks to me u r the one inventing them… probably consider patenting them sometime? hehe
nice piece… nice and short…
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January 9, 2010 9:29 am|
@ Madhu : Thanks a lot Madhu!! :p
I know, now!! Great minds think alike! 😀
@ Neha : Thank you, Neha!
January 9, 2010 9:34 am|
@ narendra : Don’t cry, Narendra! Please don’t!! 😀
You need to ask Madhu, as to what he has understood! 😀
@ Saurabh : There is a reference to the thinker with the pen in the first line itself, Saurabh!
A fiction in a 100 words is a Drabble!! 🙂
January 9, 2010 9:36 am|
@ pushpee : Happy to help!! 😀
Oh, yes, you must try it too!! Would love to see your expression in 100 words! All the very best for that! 🙂
Thanks for your feedback! 🙂
January 9, 2010 9:47 am|
@ Megha : Thanks Megha!
Yeah, it could be sad smile too or even a weary smile. But this character chose to smile sardonically! 🙂
@ vEnKy : Am glad you liked the concept of a Drabble and the interpretation, Venky! 🙂
This is the story of that man!!
January 9, 2010 9:57 am|
@ Shahid : Yeah, I was looking for different types of micro-fiction and am glad I found this!
Right you are, with name, fame and money lots of unwanted baggage accompany too. Sports, show business etc has lots of examples of these sad turn of events!
I haven’t seen Californication! 🙁
January 9, 2010 10:29 am|
@ Chatterbox : Thanks CB! Am glad you liked the interpretation! And thanks a bunch for your kind words!
Surely you must dabble into drabble (seriously though…liked the dabble drabble rhyming! :p)
January 9, 2010 10:33 am|
@ Subhayan : Thanks a lot, Subhayan! You are kind with words! 🙂
@ aativas : Agree with your view point. But I like micro-fiction and also it is more challenging!
And honestly, I have a little less patience with long stories! :p
January 9, 2010 10:35 am|
@ Rajlakshmi : Thanks you Rajlakshmi! 🙂
@ Harsha : Oh, you don’t like micro-fiction! Am very glad that you liked this one!! 🙂
January 9, 2010 10:39 am|
@ Rohitha : Thanks a ton Rohitha! You are too liberal with praise!! 😀
@ Insignia : Thanks Insignia! Am happy you liked this post!!
January 9, 2010 10:41 am|
@ Dreamer : Thanks Dreamer!! 🙂
@ SiD : Thanks Sid!!
Yeah, discovered it just yesterday! And yeah, you must edit your post!! 🙂
January 9, 2010 10:44 am|
@ Tavish : Ha Ha!! Nah, Tavish, I am not inventing them!! 😀
55 Fiction is pretty popular but not too many Drabbles seen though!
January 9, 2010 11:19 am|
Drabble … hmmm, now when a 55er goes beyond the 55 words, I know what to call it.
January 9, 2010 12:10 pm|
Great to read a drabble… from you. Hope you’ll try your hand at the other genres too 🙂
January 9, 2010 12:28 pm|
@ Phoenixritu : Ha ha!! 😀
@ Roshmi Sinha : Thank you Roshmi!! 🙂
January 9, 2010 1:04 pm|
Love,love LOVe the last line.Powerful!G’lck Shilpa!
January 9, 2010 1:24 pm|
Very creative of you to depict an image telling a story.
January 9, 2010 1:32 pm|
I would definitely recommend Californication for the lead character…very well portrayed
January 9, 2010 5:47 pm|
@ the schmuck : Thanks a lot, sweetie!! 🙂
@ Gyanban : Thks, am glad you like it! 🙂
@ Shahid : Thanks…will check this TV series, whenever possible! 🙂
January 9, 2010 5:58 pm|
Stunning piece, dear Shilpa! That’s it!!!
Just tried to ‘drabble’ my response… ;))
I’m reminded of our very own age-old Hindi saying – “Dekhan me chhote lagein, ghaav karein gambheer”. 🙂
You’ve given dear Vipul a novel idea to mull over – How about a “DRABBLE-A-PIE”…!!! ;)))
Congrats on the good innovation in indiblogging, dear Shilpa! Cheers! 🙂
Andaman & Nicobar Islands (India).
January 9, 2010 6:05 pm|
Ah, so much material in such a small write-up! Truly amazing. Liked it a lot.
All the best!
January 9, 2010 7:32 pm|
January 9, 2010 8:39 pm|
Though they were only few words, they said many things. Nice post. 🙂
Incest is a bad thing and rape is worse than that.
January 10, 2010 6:00 am|
Drabble! This is a new form I have seen and I liked it very much! The way you have written it is very gripping! You have described the life really differentely from the perspective of the prisoner! I fell in love with the sentence-success has a thousand fathers. Defeat is an orphan.
You are in my story thos time…So I will like to see your reaction on it! I hope you will not get angry with me!!
January 10, 2010 6:08 am|
especially :”Success has a thousand fathers. Defeat is an Orphan”
Good luck 🙂
January 10, 2010 10:52 am|
@ Shrinath : Thank you so much!! 🙂
Am glad you liked this tale!
Drabble-a-pie!! Hmm…sounds tempting, hope there are takes for this!!
@ Karthik : Thank you Karthik! 🙂
January 10, 2010 10:57 am|
@ Nikhil Patokar : Thanks Nikhil! 🙂
@ Nethra : Thanks Nethra, am glad you liked it!
Oh yes, its terrible and horrible!! 🙁
@ pra : Thanks a lot Pra for your feedback. Am glad you liked this new form of micro-fiction. You must try it too! 🙂
Your story…you have some imagination, lady!! Cool! 🙂
Angry?? I liked my role!! Thanks a lot for making me a part of your story!!
January 10, 2010 10:58 am|
@ gkam : Hi and Welcome on “A rose is a rose is a rose!”
Thanks a lot! Am glad you found it interesting!!
January 10, 2010 1:29 pm|
Frankly,I find it very difficult to comment on such an intelligent post.
You seem to reinvent yourself.
And I mean this sincerely.
January 10, 2010 2:24 pm|
@ BK Chowla : Thank you for your feedback, Mr. Chowla. And I am speechless at this!
Thanks for your kind words! :p
January 10, 2010 6:33 pm|
I was really inspired by this post and your last post that I decided to make a similar attempt. Please do check it out Here.
January 10, 2010 6:38 pm|
I am sorry for being late on the wagon, but I really feel sad for being late. This post is simply awesome!
Nice interpretation (it’s only after you others have started using the colour theory!) and also an utterly devastating tale!
Hats off to you!
January 11, 2010 3:03 am|
a lill disturbing… but nice
January 11, 2010 5:29 am|
What can i say about my guru of micro-fictions? Its from u I learnt the art of writing 55-Fictions! And now its drabble! ‘What an idea Madam-ji’
The interpretation of the picture was awesome shilpz! Really superb!
January 11, 2010 7:20 am|
After a long time..here you go
January 11, 2010 8:37 am|
Drabble is something I feel is new to me! Thanks for educating people like me in your first para! The story comes like a grudge to me.. The plot is extremely sensitive and serious! Sad that such incidents do happen! Good one Shilpa!
January 11, 2010 8:48 pm|
I loved it….
January 11, 2010 9:50 pm|
Hey Shilpa..wow!!I can’t stop wow-ing actually…
What an idea u brought out of it!!!
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January 12, 2010 7:09 am|
Wow..Short and sharp….great write up Shilpa…
January 12, 2010 3:54 pm|
Excellent. Very concise.
Even i had written something similar but it was 55.
Will try this form.
January 12, 2010 6:59 pm|
Subjective interpretations…..quite impacting 🙂
January 12, 2010 8:45 pm|
from friday 55 fictions to drabbling.. a gr8 frst attmpt 🙂
well, evn i yearn 4 these xtra 45 wrds at times.. so its high time, i too shift to drabbling :p
January 13, 2010 10:12 am|
loved the last line!
And the interpretation of pink and red was gr8!
January 13, 2010 10:46 am|
Wow.. a great post.. hard but touching!!
January 13, 2010 11:58 am|
@ Tanushree : Hi Tanushree!
Thank you and your post is very well written. Liked it! Keep expressing!!
@ pawan : I believe in “better late than never”. So, good to see you here!
Am glad that you liked it!
January 13, 2010 12:03 pm|
@ JustAnother : Yeah it is! Thanks and welcome on this space.
@ Shruti : 🙂
Am glad you liked the picture interpretation! Thanks. 🙂
@ Makk : Thank you, Makk. 🙂
January 13, 2010 12:07 pm|
@ neeraj : Yeah, Drabble is another form of micro-fiction.
It is truly sad but they do exist! 🙁
@ geeta : Thank you Geeta! 🙂
@ Jaunty anima: 🙂 🙂
Thank you so much, JA! Am glad you liked it!! 🙂
January 13, 2010 12:12 pm|
@ dilontherocks : Thank you!! 🙂
@ Shas : Thank you, Shas!! Yes, you should try it too!
@ Mahesh Kalaal : Came across this Drabble form of micro-fiction, just the other day!!
So tried my hands on it! 🙂
@ Vipul Grover : Yeah, when 55 is toooo less, move to Drabble! 😀
January 13, 2010 12:15 pm|
@ Yemiledu : Thank you and welcome on “A rose is a rose is a rose!”. 🙂
@ The West Wind : Thks And a big welcome to you too! 🙂
January 13, 2010 5:08 pm|
never realised 100 words can be so effective
January 14, 2010 7:45 am|
Move away 55F , 2010 is for drabble 😉
I liked the short, crisp and strong story. But frankly somehow as an entry for article based on the story , it did not jell well (it’s just my opinion, don’t mind) neverthless, I loved the story without connecting it with the image.
January 19, 2010 9:20 am|
@ anjugandhi : 🙂
@ Lakshmi Rajan : When 55 seems less. move to Drabble! 🙂
Thanks for your feedback, LR. Appreciate it! 🙂