Return
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Everything reminds me of you.
Every thought of you moistens my eyes.
I try to be strong; I try to be tough…
But the world around me works doubly hard to diminish my hopes and wipe away my memories.
Time passes but not fast enough.
Each moment and each breath waits for you to RETURN.
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September 3, 2010 7:49 pm|
Arrey wah! Nice shayari
September 3, 2010 7:52 pm|
okay..be strong..he will surely return,,,,nice!! me likes it :)) ATB
September 3, 2010 7:59 pm|
ayegaaaa…..ayegaaaa…ayegaa aane wala…aayegaa 🙂
maza aaya padh ke…all the best for BAT!
September 3, 2010 9:00 pm|
I knew it, you would be among the very first ones to post 🙂
Loved it.
September 3, 2010 9:08 pm|
wow..such a simple yet powerful post..loved those lines..they were like music playing all along 🙂 good luck 🙂
September 3, 2010 9:36 pm|
Very nice! Simple, heart-felt post!
September 3, 2010 9:53 pm|
Beautiful di.. ATB 🙂
September 3, 2010 10:25 pm|
nice rhyming work…liked it,… 🙂
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September 3, 2010 11:01 pm|
Nice 55.. loved it Shilpa..
Someone Is Special
September 4, 2010 2:25 am|
Love your words, 😛 Good luck for BAT !^^~
September 4, 2010 2:45 am|
Oh I could feel it Shilpa! Waiting for one’s return is one of the hardest in life!
Short but wonderfully penned!
All the best! 🙂
September 4, 2010 2:54 am|
Well written. . Reminds me of the poem ‘Invictus’
“I’m the master of my destiny , I’m the captain of my soul”.
Yes more often odds are stacked against.
September 4, 2010 5:19 am|
oh… that was nice, great poem!!!
September 4, 2010 5:43 am|
Liked your simple yet emotion-laden verses. Time passes, and way to0 quickly for me. My children growing up before mine eyes are proof enough.
September 4, 2010 6:44 am|
Wow! the longings a loving heart 🙂
I hope he’ll return soon 😀
Cheers!!
September 4, 2010 7:48 am|
Beautiful Shilpa….written very well. 🙂
The heart always longs for the return of the beloved – Superb. 🙂
September 4, 2010 8:23 am|
I could almost feel the longing in your verse. Nice 🙂
September 4, 2010 10:59 am|
Beautiful post depicting the emotions of a person waiting for a loved one to return. 🙂
All the best for BAT!
September 4, 2010 11:08 am|
crisp and succinct…
September 4, 2010 12:08 pm|
Short, and nice!
Would hav loved a lengthier version though!!
September 4, 2010 12:18 pm|
You proved one needn’t write a ton to drive the point home. That was a very emotional take on ‘return’ 🙂
September 4, 2010 1:20 pm|
Nice one :). SHort and great 🙂
September 4, 2010 1:35 pm|
Touching, to say the least.
So delicately have you conveyed your emotions that I am reminded of that couplet;
“Duniya ne teri yaad se begaana kar diya
Tujh se bhi dil-fareb hain gham rozgaar ke”.
September 4, 2010 1:49 pm|
Simple and cute. All the best for BAT.
September 4, 2010 2:07 pm|
You express so well in short, honest,focused post.
Shilpa, you write very well.
September 4, 2010 4:01 pm|
Waiting for someone to return-short and touching!
All the best!
September 4, 2010 4:15 pm|
Keep it short and sweet , nice craft:) all the best
September 4, 2010 7:12 pm|
wonderfully written…sweet and simple..!!!
September 4, 2010 7:46 pm|
very nice one, the concept of wait is just excellent for topic return, but i suppose this kind of seemed just a stanza, u could have written a more elaborate poem itself. all the best for BAT !
September 5, 2010 5:11 am|
Very poignant, simple yet moving. Well written.
September 5, 2010 5:14 am|
somehow there seems to be a lot that you said in the short composition. I don’t know if it’s just me but that struck me real close. I guess you did good 🙂 but at the same time it’s made me a little sad but then I guess you did good 🙂
September 5, 2010 5:33 am|
Simple, small yet so strong and moving. I am very impressed.
Best of Luck for BAT
September 5, 2010 7:01 am|
Hey bhagwaan. Kitni 55F likhogi?
I first read and thought itna chhota post kyo hai. Later I realized 55F hai.
Post KG ko padhayi? As I always maintain – it’s nice – but I expect more from you.
September 5, 2010 8:55 am|
Short and crisp. You do it so well Shilpa
Best wishes
September 5, 2010 1:07 pm|
Concise description of a feeling that i’ve felt so often.
Cheerz!
September 5, 2010 2:13 pm|
“Time passes but not fast enough.
Each moment and each breath waits for you to RETURN”
These two lines should have been the theme for BAT.
Very well written.
September 6, 2010 10:48 am|
hey nice one… i was late to post…so out of bat 14 this time 🙁
hey need a favour… could you promote my post http://digs.by/c6CRNr if you like it…
I bet u’ll like it… 🙂
September 6, 2010 5:16 pm|
aaaha the queen of Fiction 55 presents another amazing F55er…. loved it Shilpa… awesome!
Cheers!
Tavish
September 6, 2010 5:59 pm|
short & poignant..the sad longings of a broken heart.. all the best for BAT!
September 6, 2010 6:51 pm|
Short, yet delivering every emotion decipherable of a broken heart yearning for the love he lost.
Beautiful.
All the best for BAT.
September 6, 2010 9:11 pm|
beautiful and meaningful lines
September 10, 2010 7:32 am|
Been busy. Trying to catch up. Waiting for return and zalim duniya not letting you? Good luck for marathon
September 12, 2010 2:31 pm|
a sweet little poem. If this were facebook, i would definitely have liked it 🙂
September 15, 2010 5:28 am|
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