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UBC Day 13 : Haiku – Rain

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This is my first attempt at a Haiku, a Japanese poetic form.

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Mesmerized child

Glorious palette smiles bright

Storms of life recede

This is in response to the WriteTribe Prompt for a Kigo Haiku

Image Courtesy : Google Images

45 Responses

  1. I learnt about a new thing today. Haiku.
    I knew that there is this form of poetry, but only today I read the rules. 🙂 Thanks to you. 🙂

  2. That’s a good one. Congratulations on your first attempt. One small observation. Your first sentence has only 4 syllables instead of 5.

    1. Thanks SG. I checked at Syllable Counter – WordCalc.com and it shows that sentence 1 has 5 syllables. 😛

      1. Thanks Shilpa for your reply. Of course, Syllable Counter – WordCalc.com shows 5 syllables.

        I looked at 2 different sources. http://www.syllablecount.com and howmanysyllables.com. They both show only 4 syllables.

        Since different websites give different answers, looks like we both are correct.

  3. Haikus are stealing my heart away.Should learn the rules one of these days. Nice cheerful one Shilpi.. U dont mind me calling you Shilpi, do you?

  4. I read in midway that corinne commented you have fear of poetry! Well you shouldn’t have because you write quite well! And I too wrote on the rainbow side of monsoons, it shows the beauty of rain through colours no?

    1. I dread poems especially commenting about them 😉 LOL 😀
      Your interpretation of rains and rainbows is so cool 🙂

  5. That is a delightful Haiku Shilpa, welcome to the tiny world of Haiku 🙂 Child’s innocence sees the world clearly than grown-up minds.
    Syllable counting can feel quite complex but essentially it is how you pronounce a word, so your haiku will read
    Mes – mer- ized- child :4
    Glo-ri-ous- pal-ette- smiles – bright :7
    Storms- of- life- re-cede : 5
    Hope this helps 🙂
    I generally use “http://www.poetrysoup.com/haiku_syllable_counter/” for my reference.

    1. Thanks a ton, Reshma for sharing some wonderful insights. Of course, you are a pro at it and I need to go learn a lot about this! Have bookmarked the site you mentioned. Will check it out when I attempt my next Haiku 🙂

  6. Loved the imagery – Gives the reader a lot of scope for interpretation ! And you have done it without using the seasonal reference explicitly !

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