Old Head On Young Shoulders
It is never enough. Whatever I do never impresses him. I know he is hurting inside.
Mother’s untimely death and his own physical disability has devastated him.
Sometimes, I want to get my old life back and stop feeling responsible for my father all the time.
I want those carefree days back and stop worrying about the bills to be paid with my small job at the shop.
But then I realize that I cannot change the circumstances or the wind, but I can change the way I think.
I am responsible for my future and it will be bright!
This is a fiction written for Write Tribe’s Wednesday Picture Prompt : The Boy
Image Courtesy : MorgueFile
November 27, 2013 2:57 pm|
You gave it a much more optimistic and positive close than I would have 😐
November 27, 2013 3:52 pm|
To me this picture shows positivity… he is stepping out from darkness to light with a bag of books… hence this closing! 🙂
November 27, 2013 10:00 pm|
Love this interpretation you’ve given here… ‘stepping out from darkness to light…’
November 27, 2013 10:36 pm|
Glad you liked it, Roshan. Thanks 🙂
November 27, 2013 3:01 pm|
I am responsible for my future and it will be bright! Amen! positive thinking. We cannot change some things but we can definitely change our thinking.
November 27, 2013 3:54 pm|
Yes, like they say keep your face always toward the sunshine – and shadows will fall behind you!!
November 27, 2013 3:21 pm|
Awww…what a heavy weight for such young shoulders. My heart aches, Shilpa!
November 27, 2013 3:56 pm|
… and this is a sad reality for so many kids!! Growing beyond their years so early!
November 27, 2013 3:28 pm|
Very few people can survive and thrive against massive odds. Glad that your protagonist is one of them 🙂
Destination Infinity
November 27, 2013 3:59 pm|
True, it is tough! But then if you don’t change your life, your life will change you! Am glad too that the boy worked towards changing his life!
November 27, 2013 6:37 pm|
Lovely post, that ending in particular clinched it all, love the fact that you correlated him walking out into the sunlight with the optimistic view of life 😀
November 27, 2013 10:27 pm|
Thanks Jairam. Glad you liked this approach to the story! 🙂
November 27, 2013 6:38 pm|
Love the way you projected such optimism.
November 27, 2013 10:31 pm|
Thanks Talya! 🙂
November 27, 2013 7:07 pm|
What heavy responsibilities for someone so young! A lovely work!
November 27, 2013 10:32 pm|
Yeah, sadly for some life’s like that!! Thank you Michelle 🙂
November 27, 2013 8:49 pm|
Awww… such an awful load on such young shoulders. But I’m glad the kiddo is being positive about his tomorrows… good one Shilpa 🙂
November 27, 2013 10:33 pm|
Yes, must have realized that once you replace negative thoughts with positive ones, you’ll start having positive results! Thanks Bhavya 🙂
November 27, 2013 10:28 pm|
That was a beautiful story. I loved the ending, which is actually a new beginning. There will be so many like him out there. Poor kids!
November 27, 2013 10:35 pm|
Yes, that’s the power of positive thinking. Glad that he was able to take that step unlike so many others who get crushed under the burden of responsibilities at a young age. Thanks Rekha 🙂
November 28, 2013 12:45 am|
Interesting take on the prompt Shilpa.. Btw your ‘stepping out from darkness to light…’ was brilliant !!
November 29, 2013 2:47 pm|
Thank you Jyotsana 🙂
November 28, 2013 12:58 am|
Whatever happens… or whoever leaves from your life… we should move on… Good one Shilpa! 🙂
November 29, 2013 2:50 pm|
Well said, cribbing about the past wouldn’t change anything, taking charge and moving forward is the key! Thanks Sheethal 🙂
November 28, 2013 6:30 am|
Positive outlook at all times is tough to find, but once you have it, you have it all!!
Good one Shilpa:)
November 29, 2013 2:54 pm|
Spot on! Like they say, when things go wrong, don’t go with them… get up and move ahead again!
November 28, 2013 7:28 am|
That’s a nice positive story…lovely one for the prompt.
i always get stuck at picture prompts.
November 29, 2013 2:55 pm|
Thank you, Kajal!
But you do them so well!! Waiting for your post 🙂
November 28, 2013 9:22 am|
He is a determined young man who knows what he wants to do for a better future.
November 29, 2013 2:55 pm|
Oh yes, he is! 🙂
November 28, 2013 11:11 am|
nice story written with a positive outlook.
November 29, 2013 2:56 pm|
Thank you Ma’am 🙂
November 28, 2013 1:56 pm|
I loved the positive ending. Truly, what we can’t change is not worth crying over.
November 29, 2013 2:57 pm|
Thanks Rachna! Agree, no point in fixing what is already broken. Just start afresh!
November 28, 2013 3:42 pm|
such a wonderful way to think! You have to be responsible for your own thoughts and actions.
November 29, 2013 2:58 pm|
Thanks Robyn. Yes, it’s our thoughts and actions that define who we truly are!
November 28, 2013 5:31 pm|
I like your style of writing and the positivity that reflects in these posts. Keep going! Maybe you can also select a longer prompt sometime and challenge your writing skills further. Just saying 🙂
November 29, 2013 3:00 pm|
Thanks Nisha. Glad you liked this piece! And thanks for the confidence :), yes, must explore that too 🙂
November 28, 2013 5:56 pm|
It was a positive end, I really like it. There is so much of negativity all around these days that all I look for is something positive.. 🙂 Others have commented already about the positiveness of your story, but I had to say it too. 🙂
November 29, 2013 3:01 pm|
Thank you Shilpa. They say that it makes a big difference in your life when you stay positive!! So, we should be positive always.
November 28, 2013 8:06 pm|
The boy finally let go of his guilt and the unfounded burden of responsibility. This can be extrapolated to many of our lives. No?
November 29, 2013 3:02 pm|
Oh yes, happens to us all the time, when we crib about the struggles and then change the way we think to make things work!
November 28, 2013 9:16 pm|
A very positive attitude: for it is true what we think only can actually shape our lives. Even if sometimes our mind plays tricks with us, and puts negative thoughts in us, if we are smart, we can soon change our thought patterns and think positive, and then only positive things would somehow make their way into our lives.
November 29, 2013 3:04 pm|
You are absolutely right, Rama. Our way of thinking creates good or bad outcomes!!
November 28, 2013 10:03 pm|
Only the boy can be responsible for his own future. Thanks for sharing, Shilpa, poignant thoughts!
November 29, 2013 3:04 pm|
Thank you Michelle! 🙂
Loved your take on the prompt too! 🙂
November 29, 2013 6:21 pm|
I like the optimisism.in fact.I always appreciate positive thinking from any quarter.
November 29, 2013 6:45 pm|
Thanks Mr Chowla 🙂
November 30, 2013 7:19 pm|
Ended just the way it should – positive and bright!
December 3, 2013 9:04 pm|
Thanks Neha 🙂
December 1, 2013 9:13 pm|
I love how despite all odds his outlook remains positive and bright. He believes things will get better and he will survive. He believes this too shall pass and he will emerge triumphant. Simply love that. Such amazing faith makes life worth living.
December 3, 2013 9:05 pm|
Well said, Kathy, with faith and positivity, we can conquer all odds!
December 2, 2013 5:03 pm|
Loved that you ended it in a positive note. 🙂
Do check mine here – http://wp.me/p2Aqoq-i5
December 3, 2013 9:06 pm|
Thank you D 🙂
December 4, 2013 11:30 am|
You always amaze me with your drabbles, Shilpa and this one… I absolutely loved
December 21, 2013 5:23 pm|
Thank you Bhagyashree. Glad you liked it 🙂
December 16, 2013 12:36 pm|
A Wonderful write-up and a nice pic to go with it !!
December 21, 2013 5:24 pm|
Thanks Sreeja 🙂