55 Fiction is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.
So Close, Yet So…
“Damn!” she said, as he helped her pick the fallen tomatoes. A coy “Thanks” and two smiles were exchanged, that day and then every day.
Some long chats… shared laughter… growing together …blissful moments later she mused, “When you click together, you are bound to leap into the future mentally”.
And, he answered, “I can’t.”
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25 Responses
ouch poor girl….
n wow shilpa, that was some 55er…very well written…too different..:))
tht was nice shilpa…liked it..
Another good one…
Honest guy,huh !!Shilpa you are a master of 55 fiction…loved it.
Short and hitting. Good one…
Shilpa! that was different altogether. Liked it 🙂
Some love stories are written in blood err 55 words … :p
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that was fairly a nice call !!
if I were there i would have accepted it !!! 😛
@ Neha : Yeah…sad for the girl! 🙁
Am glad you found it good! 🙂
@ Shahid : Thank you! 🙂
@ Roshmi : Thanks Girl. 🙂
@ kavita : Hmm…honest and perceptive enough to read her thoughts so clearly!!
Thanks for the appreciation! 🙂
@ Madhu Rao : Thank you Madhu! 🙂
@ Musings of a lonely traveler :Am glad you liked it Mohammed! 🙂
@ Mr : Thanks 🙂
Had deactivated that due to some nuisance. Reactivating now!
@ pRiYaN : Thank you Priyan. 🙂
Hmm…that would had given a happy ending to it or a new beginning!! 🙂
ooooooooo.. so sad.. sheesha ho ya dil ho.. akhir toot jaata hai :p
Good One!!! 🙂
First time here… I never attempted a 55er 🙂 will try once soon!
that was a nice shorty… thanks for visiting my blog 🙂
Very nice.Kind of getting used to getting the best from you.
I would have loved to say “Wow!!”, but then I didn’t get an inkling of what you wanted to say.
Now please write a “So close, yet so far… for Dummies” and tell me what was it all about. And before you say it, I know I am an idiot. 🙂
reality bites !! fantasy dies 😉
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@ Vipul Grover : Hmmm…. 🙁
…toot jaata hai…toot jaata hai! :p
@ Shashank Shekhar : Thank you. 🙂
@ Mohan : Welcome on a “A rose is a rose is a rose!”, Mohan!
You must write a 55 Fiction. Looking forward to your tale in 55 words!! 🙂
@ BK Chowla : Thank you Mr. Chowla. Your appreciation means a lot! 🙂
@ Paritosh : I like your sense of humor!! 😀
@ lostworld: Sad, but true!! 🙂
I appreciate for your wonderful post. I liked it very much.
Wow ! Aal izz not well eh 😉 … one more thing… cube pic ka context samajh me nahi aya …. explain 😀
nice 🙂
@ Babli : 🙂
@ Dhiman : Thanks 🙂
Ok…why cube?…see it’s nearly done but not complete, just like their relationship (from the girl’s perspective!)
@ Reema : Thanks Reema 🙂