Friday’s 55 Fiction : The Mundane Struggles
55 Fiction is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.
The Mundane Struggles
The eyes kept darting back and forth between the clock and the door.
The sense of impending doom began to grow with each passing second.
Nothing is more punishing than this act of waiting, a thought flashed through the mind.
The anguish was broken by the ringing phone.
She isn’t coming, today!
Arggh! The maid!!
December 7, 2012 6:05 pm|
Short and surprising…
The daily woes of a women…. I am sure all of us experience dis every now and then… Great!
December 8, 2012 6:34 am|
Oh yes… the daily battles which are part and parcel of a woman’s life!! Sigh!!
December 7, 2012 6:06 pm|
Oh yes most of us dread the day the maid bunks work without warning… I hope this is a true fiction and she turned up for work.Cos when its wintry and cold, you sure need your maid Shilpa.
December 8, 2012 6:40 am|
You are absolutely right, Reshma! This is certainly a story based on real life incident, which happened yesterday and thus the idea for this 55 Fiction! Bunking suddenly is just not right! It derails the whole system at home! 😐
December 7, 2012 7:40 pm|
Haha…The daily drama at home when Ma is getting worried about the maid. We’ve in fact begun calling the maid as Ma’s best friend..No one can bring that lightning relief and smile on my Mom’s face in the morning except her 😀
December 8, 2012 6:49 am|
My situation is exactly like your Mom! And let me tell you that you will also experience the same, Harshita! 😀
December 8, 2012 3:01 am|
Aaah! The paid, maid of honour:)
December 8, 2012 6:50 am|
You bet!! 😛
December 8, 2012 6:13 am|
You fooled me. I fell off the chair!!!
December 8, 2012 6:50 am|
December 8, 2012 7:10 am|
My wife says that maid is the most important person in the life of a woman… I guess the sentiment is omnipresent 🙂
December 8, 2012 8:01 am|
Oh yes, she is absolutely right! One of my maid, takes leave on 10th, 20th and 30th of every month (you see, 3 leaves in a month are mandatory ), so I am prepared for these days, I dont have to wait for her and plan my schedule accordingly. But this taking leaves without any warning is big pain! 🙁
December 8, 2012 8:11 am|
ha ha ha!!!
You have put it so aptly!!! I always say that if my hubby says I am going out for 3 days I am most happy but if the maid says so? I go into Panic zone!!
P.S. I am sorry that I couldn’t comment on ur parentous post, had read but was in a hurry and missed commenting. And I remembered yesterday that I had forgotten to comment!!
December 8, 2012 8:48 am|
LOL 😀 but I know the feeling, Smita! If she informs and takes leave, I am still ok with that, but the sudden leaves are very bugging! And a leave of a day is manageable, but 2-3 days at a stretch… God!!
That’s so very thoughtful and sweet of you, Smita!! That’s OK and thank you for your wonderful timely inputs! Appreciate that a lot! 🙂
December 8, 2012 10:43 am|
totally agree on that! Thankfully my maid is very good in that department. SHe usually gives us a week’s notice before not coming. This maid went for a months break last month….I had a harrowing time with another maid.
December 8, 2012 12:45 pm|
That’s simply how they should function! Inform in advance or call, but this waiting is very irritating!! *Sigh*
December 8, 2012 8:20 am|
🙂 I thought a student was waiting for a teacher who has given a test. 😛
December 8, 2012 8:51 am|
December 8, 2012 9:45 am|
Lol ! such a twisted story… !!
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December 8, 2012 10:17 am|
Hi Heiress! Welcome to this space and glad that this made you laugh! Thanks for following! See you around! 🙂
December 8, 2012 10:03 am|
Maid-service should become professional. If one maid is not coming, the agency providing maid services should send another maid, temporarily. These things can happen, but the cost will increase dramatically. One or two days of maid absence seems to be better than that, no? 🙂
December 8, 2012 10:20 am|
Valid points DI, but the professional maid services are far from professional and in fact some friends and acquaintances have had some terrible experiences courtesy these ‘Professional’ services! 😐
December 8, 2012 10:50 am|
Creatively worded, beautiful job on your 55-er!
Oh, no! not there too. The maid not turning up for work brings our life to a standstill, though bravely we can say it is not so. Atleast, i prefer she informs me a day before and have given my mobile no to call me when she does’nt come.
To find a parttime on the same day and the nakhras they throw, omg! such a pain.
December 8, 2012 12:52 pm|
The part-timers are just not available coz the busy bees that they are, they just dont have time! 😐
December 8, 2012 11:12 am|
hahaha So true! At least your maid calls, mine just vanishes :).
December 8, 2012 12:52 pm|
Yeah, some solace that is!! 😐
December 8, 2012 1:41 pm|
ha ha :-)) What a finish :_))))))))
December 8, 2012 1:42 pm|
Thanks Sundar :))
December 9, 2012 7:43 pm|
A nice idea behind the story, totally could not understand you were referring to maid before the ending, Ah this happens all the time in our lives !
December 10, 2012 6:53 am|
Thanks Sunil! Glad you liked the twist! Yeah, this is a part and parcel of every woman’s life!
December 10, 2012 6:46 am|
lol… unexpected twist… Nothing is more irritated to the housewives than these maids who bunk without warning 😀 😀
December 10, 2012 7:01 am|
Yes, the unpredictability in a 55 Fiction makes it interesting! 🙂
December 10, 2012 8:09 am|
Shilpa,though I am out of this responsibility at home,but,I can,looking at my wife’s mood in the morning can sense a ” Maid Problem”
December 11, 2012 5:41 pm|
I can so relate to this!! :))
December 11, 2012 1:19 am|
Haha…maids are also modern these days. They carry a cell phone. Before, either the husband or the kid would come and pass the message if she is sick. 🙂
December 11, 2012 5:43 pm|
Oh yeah! And this maid of mine, keeps changing her caller tunes too. And I have never ever done that on my phone! 😐
December 15, 2012 6:37 am|
haha..I read the first few lines with bated breath..thought it was something sinister 😛 Loved the end. Made me laugh…
December 15, 2012 8:01 am|
Maid not turning up is sinister!! 😀
December 15, 2012 7:31 am|
LOL. Maid travails are so difficulty to bear. Nice 55 fiction.
December 15, 2012 8:02 am|
Oh yeah! Only the women can understand this pain! 😐