If Only You Were Here
The room had a look of being ransacked, with clothes strewn all over and newspapers filling in the gaps. Still, the cheque book was elusive.
I looked around with frustration but all I could see was dust that had settled everywhere.
Tired and defeated, I sat while our 3 year old marriage flashed in front of my eyes. I realise now, how I quashed all your efforts to nurture and strengthen our relationship. I now understand….
If only you were here now with me…
Something was turning into ashes, somewhere… my arrogance, my idiosyncrasies and a toast among other things.
Linking this to 100 words on Saturday at Write Tribe prompt of ‘If only you were here’.
September 22, 2013 6:40 pm|
Better late than never!
Earlier it was 55-words, now it is 100-words – is it? 🙂
Destination Infinity
September 25, 2013 10:50 am|
WOW!! I am impressed, Rajesh 🙂 😀
September 22, 2013 6:47 pm|
Well said in 100 words. Regrets 🙂
September 25, 2013 10:53 am|
Yes, regrets and the lessons… Thanks a lot, Shail 🙂
September 22, 2013 6:55 pm|
Your words paint a powerful picture, lovely
September 25, 2013 10:55 am|
Thank you Sulekha 🙂
September 22, 2013 7:03 pm|
So true what you have written shilpa. Many marriages char because of the arrogance , ego etc of the couple:(
As i am reading this, i wish my two friends P and V who broke their marriage for a frivolous reason read your post too. I wish they realize their mistake and get back atleast for their twins sake. They were such a lovely and beautiful couple.
September 25, 2013 10:59 am|
So sorry about your friends. Yes, sometimes, couples separate over such trivial issues and the poor kids suffer the most! 🙁
Hope things work out for P and V!
September 22, 2013 7:14 pm|
Wow, that was excellent, Shilpa. Very powerful
September 25, 2013 11:00 am|
Thanks Kajal 🙂
September 22, 2013 7:30 pm|
Oh the mistakes we make – not investing time in significant relationships always comes back to bite us! How well you brought this out, Shilpa!
September 25, 2013 11:02 am|
So true… the lost opportunities!!
Thank you Corinne 🙂
September 22, 2013 7:41 pm|
Mistakes, ego, if only life gave second choices
September 22, 2013 7:42 pm|
Typo not choices but chance
September 25, 2013 11:03 am|
Well said and most people dont get second chances in life, sadly!
September 22, 2013 7:51 pm|
It is a sad picture, in most cases it is the ego that acts as a big hurdle.
Two people cannot be the same, there should always be a give and take policy between couples to make a relationship work. Only few matured couples understand this, others are out searching for the elusive perfect person.
September 25, 2013 11:05 am|
Agree, Rama. As somebody said, a relationship is a two way street, not a highway and a bike path. If you really want to be with someone you have to be willing to make some sacrifices and work at it a little, otherwise the relationship will never work!
September 22, 2013 7:52 pm|
Arrogance on the part of any one in a marriage leads to conflict and separation. In 100 words you have very beautifully expressed the reality.
September 25, 2013 11:11 am|
Oh yes, arrogance can ruin a relationship. Thank you Ma’am 🙂
September 22, 2013 8:09 pm|
I could feel the anguish and regret in each word. You perfectly captured the feelings following the break up of the relationship! Awesome!
September 25, 2013 11:12 am|
Thanks a lot, Kathy! Glad you liked this piece 🙂
September 22, 2013 8:26 pm|
lovely story, Shilpa. Very evocative.
September 25, 2013 11:12 am|
Thank you Ava 🙂
September 22, 2013 11:32 pm|
Very well written. Powerful message.
September 25, 2013 11:13 am|
Thank you SG 🙂
September 23, 2013 12:10 am|
Wonderfully penned down
If only one could digest ego for love…
September 25, 2013 11:16 am|
True… it is better to lose your ego to the one you love than to lose the one you love because of ego! Thanks Harshita 🙂
September 23, 2013 8:12 am|
Well written Shilpa! The lost time never comes back, sigh!
September 25, 2013 11:17 am|
Yes and all you are left with is regrets…. thank you Mr Bhatia!
September 23, 2013 8:23 am|
Many a marriage gets broken by ego, arrogance etc. Nice take on the prompt Shilpa!
September 25, 2013 11:19 am|
True. That is why it is said ‘Leave ego. Otherwise everyone would leave you’!
Thanks Jayashree 🙂
September 23, 2013 10:11 am|
Verry well written Shipla!!!
P.S. U don’t write anything outside writetribe these days?? 🙁
September 25, 2013 11:21 am|
Thanks Shilpa.
LOL… there are regular and interesting prompts at WT, so am happy writing on these prompts! 😀
September 23, 2013 10:58 am|
Commendable..!
September 25, 2013 11:21 am|
Thanks Aakanksha 🙂
September 23, 2013 11:32 am|
I liked all your post for writetribe..
you are really good with fiction 🙂
September 25, 2013 11:22 am|
Thank you so much Rashmi! Why dont you write for some of the prompts too! 🙂
September 23, 2013 11:53 am|
You fiction writing is so so good!! ‘ghar ki murgi dal barabar’ is something we understand long after that ‘dal’ is also gone!
September 25, 2013 11:26 am|
Oh yeah, dont value the murgi and then live with regrets for the things that you didnt do! Thanks LP, nothing when compared to you! 🙂
September 23, 2013 11:55 am|
Well, very well-written. The word-building that led to the world-building was simply superb. Point poignantly put. Loved it.
September 25, 2013 11:26 am|
Thanks a lot, Jini 🙂
September 23, 2013 12:42 pm|
May be in those burnt ashes they will rediscover their marriage!
September 25, 2013 11:27 am|
Hope so!
September 23, 2013 1:49 pm|
We don’t realise the value of people around us until they’re gone. Lovely story, only 100 words but point made well. 🙂
September 25, 2013 11:44 am|
True, we don’t realize what we’ve got until it’s gone!! Thanks Shilpa 🙂
September 23, 2013 2:43 pm|
Sad reminder that more needs to be invested to keep relationships alive and kicking…
September 25, 2013 11:44 am|
True, true!!
September 23, 2013 3:33 pm|
Beautifully written post and the describe made the whole setting alive. I emphatize with the emotions of the character, sitting with tears and sadness in her eyes. Lil’ do we realize what she must be going through. It’s sad yet so beautifully written. Thumbs up, Shilpa.
September 25, 2013 11:57 am|
Thanks a lot, Vishal! Yes, ‘if only…’ the saddest 2 words… the value of which we realize much later!
September 23, 2013 3:59 pm|
It takes two hands to clap – it’s never entirely one person’s fault – spoken from experience.
September 25, 2013 11:58 am|
That’s true, Suzy!
September 23, 2013 4:39 pm|
Well said in 100 words Shilpa.
September 25, 2013 11:59 am|
Thanks Diana 🙂
September 23, 2013 5:05 pm|
SG, that was well said short and crisp. Told much in those few words and sentences.
September 25, 2013 12:00 pm|
Thank you Anil! So good to see you here, after a long time! How have you been?
September 23, 2013 5:25 pm|
This was so poignant… reminded me of myself in some ways.
September 25, 2013 12:00 pm|
Is it? Now, you have made me all curious! 😛
September 23, 2013 5:59 pm|
Relationships burn and char due to negative factors like ego , arrogance etc. and take charge before it turns to ashes. well-said in 100 words.
September 25, 2013 12:01 pm|
Well said, Kalpana! If only we realize all this in time!
September 24, 2013 3:39 am|
so true..life is like that..we realise after mistakes are done
September 25, 2013 12:02 pm|
Oh yes and sometimes we dont get chances to rectify them!
September 25, 2013 2:38 pm|
Beautifully expressed! It is indeed difficult to live with regrets after we make foolish decisions. 🙂
September 25, 2013 4:18 pm|
Ego-centrism results in incompatibility…which never gives way to happy marriage…
Lovely written post…
September 29, 2013 7:37 am|
beautiful indeed, shilpa!
gotta invest in this relationship. wonderful message!