The room had a look of being ransacked, with clothes strewn all over and newspapers filling in the gaps. Still, the cheque book was elusive.
I looked around with frustration but all I could see was dust that had settled everywhere.
Tired and defeated, I sat while our 3 year old marriage flashed in front of my eyes. I realise now, how I quashed all your efforts to nurture and strengthen our relationship. I now understand….
If only you were here now with me…
Something was turning into ashes, somewhere… my arrogance, my idiosyncrasies and a toast among other things.
Linking this to 100 words on Saturday at Write Tribe prompt of ‘If only you were here’.
64 Responses
Better late than never!
Earlier it was 55-words, now it is 100-words – is it? 🙂
Destination Infinity
WOW!! I am impressed, Rajesh 🙂 😀
Well said in 100 words. Regrets 🙂
Yes, regrets and the lessons… Thanks a lot, Shail 🙂
Your words paint a powerful picture, lovely
Thank you Sulekha 🙂
So true what you have written shilpa. Many marriages char because of the arrogance , ego etc of the couple:(
As i am reading this, i wish my two friends P and V who broke their marriage for a frivolous reason read your post too. I wish they realize their mistake and get back atleast for their twins sake. They were such a lovely and beautiful couple.
So sorry about your friends. Yes, sometimes, couples separate over such trivial issues and the poor kids suffer the most! 🙁
Hope things work out for P and V!
Wow, that was excellent, Shilpa. Very powerful
Thanks Kajal 🙂
Oh the mistakes we make – not investing time in significant relationships always comes back to bite us! How well you brought this out, Shilpa!
So true… the lost opportunities!!
Thank you Corinne 🙂
Mistakes, ego, if only life gave second choices
Typo not choices but chance
Well said and most people dont get second chances in life, sadly!
It is a sad picture, in most cases it is the ego that acts as a big hurdle.
Two people cannot be the same, there should always be a give and take policy between couples to make a relationship work. Only few matured couples understand this, others are out searching for the elusive perfect person.
Agree, Rama. As somebody said, a relationship is a two way street, not a highway and a bike path. If you really want to be with someone you have to be willing to make some sacrifices and work at it a little, otherwise the relationship will never work!
Arrogance on the part of any one in a marriage leads to conflict and separation. In 100 words you have very beautifully expressed the reality.
Oh yes, arrogance can ruin a relationship. Thank you Ma’am 🙂
I could feel the anguish and regret in each word. You perfectly captured the feelings following the break up of the relationship! Awesome!
Thanks a lot, Kathy! Glad you liked this piece 🙂
lovely story, Shilpa. Very evocative.
Thank you Ava 🙂
Very well written. Powerful message.
Thank you SG 🙂
Wonderfully penned down
If only one could digest ego for love…
True… it is better to lose your ego to the one you love than to lose the one you love because of ego! Thanks Harshita 🙂
Well written Shilpa! The lost time never comes back, sigh!
Yes and all you are left with is regrets…. thank you Mr Bhatia!
Many a marriage gets broken by ego, arrogance etc. Nice take on the prompt Shilpa!
True. That is why it is said ‘Leave ego. Otherwise everyone would leave you’!
Thanks Jayashree 🙂
Verry well written Shipla!!!
P.S. U don’t write anything outside writetribe these days?? 🙁
Thanks Shilpa.
LOL… there are regular and interesting prompts at WT, so am happy writing on these prompts! 😀
Commendable..!
Thanks Aakanksha 🙂
I liked all your post for writetribe..
you are really good with fiction 🙂
Thank you so much Rashmi! Why dont you write for some of the prompts too! 🙂
You fiction writing is so so good!! ‘ghar ki murgi dal barabar’ is something we understand long after that ‘dal’ is also gone!
Oh yeah, dont value the murgi and then live with regrets for the things that you didnt do! Thanks LP, nothing when compared to you! 🙂
Well, very well-written. The word-building that led to the world-building was simply superb. Point poignantly put. Loved it.
Thanks a lot, Jini 🙂
May be in those burnt ashes they will rediscover their marriage!
Hope so!
We don’t realise the value of people around us until they’re gone. Lovely story, only 100 words but point made well. 🙂
True, we don’t realize what we’ve got until it’s gone!! Thanks Shilpa 🙂
Sad reminder that more needs to be invested to keep relationships alive and kicking…
True, true!!
Beautifully written post and the describe made the whole setting alive. I emphatize with the emotions of the character, sitting with tears and sadness in her eyes. Lil’ do we realize what she must be going through. It’s sad yet so beautifully written. Thumbs up, Shilpa.
Thanks a lot, Vishal! Yes, ‘if only…’ the saddest 2 words… the value of which we realize much later!
It takes two hands to clap – it’s never entirely one person’s fault – spoken from experience.
That’s true, Suzy!
Well said in 100 words Shilpa.
Thanks Diana 🙂
SG, that was well said short and crisp. Told much in those few words and sentences.
Thank you Anil! So good to see you here, after a long time! How have you been?
This was so poignant… reminded me of myself in some ways.
Is it? Now, you have made me all curious! 😛
Relationships burn and char due to negative factors like ego , arrogance etc. and take charge before it turns to ashes. well-said in 100 words.
Well said, Kalpana! If only we realize all this in time!
so true..life is like that..we realise after mistakes are done
Oh yes and sometimes we dont get chances to rectify them!
Beautifully expressed! It is indeed difficult to live with regrets after we make foolish decisions. 🙂
Ego-centrism results in incompatibility…which never gives way to happy marriage…
Lovely written post…
beautiful indeed, shilpa!
gotta invest in this relationship. wonderful message!