Lucky Today
I heard the car’s horn.
I heard the door being opened and I felt my knees turn to jelly. Quickly, I hid under the bed.
I heard the door being slammed shut and his sugary voice, “Where are you, sweetie?”
I heard his footsteps on the stairs as sweat beads trickled down my spine. “Where are you, sweetie?”, he asked again.
I heard my heart pounding in my ears, as he opened and closed the adjacent room. “Where are you, sweetie?”, his voice was gentle yet coaxing.
I heard another car honk. It’s Mom and relief washed over me
This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda.
We give out themes for creative writing each weekend for Indian bloggers.
This time your entry has to have one sentence that is repeated at least thrice in your post.
Linking this post to the Ultimate Blog Challenge and October’s NaBloPoMo.
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October 27, 2013 5:13 am|
There are some unanswered questions and that makes such short fiction really interesting. Nice
October 27, 2013 7:50 pm|
Yes, leaves a lot for imagination 😀
October 27, 2013 6:59 am|
wow… nicely written Shilpa!
October 27, 2013 7:51 pm|
Thanks Pixie 🙂
October 27, 2013 8:17 am|
Gosh I could feel the little girl’s relief.. wonderful Shilpa.
October 27, 2013 7:51 pm|
Thanks OM.
October 27, 2013 9:09 am|
The menacing sweetness does little to hide the evil of abuse. Wonderful writeup Shilpa.
October 27, 2013 7:56 pm|
True, it is only the victim who is able to see the facade of the abuser. Sadly the others around take a long long time to recognize the evil behind the sweetness!
October 27, 2013 9:26 am|
Pedophiles should be shot dead on the spot. The girl should tell the mother or the teacher in school.
October 27, 2013 7:58 pm|
Agree completely, SG!! They say, that either the child is threatened by the abuser to keep quiet or the child (though knows that whatever is happening is wrong) is clueless about the steps to take to prevent the abuse!
October 27, 2013 9:52 am|
An interesting story of the fear of a young girl, in limited words conveys so much.
October 27, 2013 7:59 pm|
Thank you Ma’am.
October 27, 2013 10:28 am|
Just want to add a few stuff. Here, it is the responsibility of the school teachers to be aware of and investigate if a student is unhappy or withdrawn or notice any bruise on the body.
If a child is taken to a hospital or doctor 3 times in a year for an “injury or accident”, the hospital/doctor will call the police immediately. It is the law.
October 27, 2013 8:22 pm|
True, teachers and parents should recognize the difference in behavioral pattern of the child and ask/probe/help the child.
Regarding this law… while, it may work out well abroad where the health data /records are centralized, well documented and online, I wonder if it is feasible in India where such advancements in record maintenance is still not a reality!
October 27, 2013 10:32 am|
WOW! Imagine the way the same sentence can be spoken to evoke two different emotions altogether. *hats off*
October 27, 2013 8:23 pm|
Thanks Richa! Glad you liked this piece! 🙂
October 27, 2013 12:03 pm|
Interesting ..well written
October 27, 2013 8:24 pm|
Thank you Sindhura 🙂
October 27, 2013 4:27 pm|
An amazing drabble, once again. Sad part is that this happens for real with some. 🙁
October 27, 2013 8:29 pm|
True, it is a sad reality for so many kids!! My heart goes out for such silent sufferers 🙁
October 27, 2013 4:51 pm|
Great piece and very well written. You’ve managed to get across the little girl’s feelings aptly. Sad that such events happens quite frequently with little kids
October 27, 2013 8:58 pm|
Thanks Sid! Yes, such crimes against children happen so commonly. It is time we made our children aware about such abuse and break the silence and the stigma associated with this crime.
October 27, 2013 5:13 pm|
Interesting…it has a sad side and unanswered questions, which makes us think…
October 27, 2013 9:02 pm|
Hmmm…. true.
October 27, 2013 6:51 pm|
Aww…. that was spot on !! A nice take on child sexual abuse, if I can interpret it that way….. Superb !
October 27, 2013 9:04 pm|
Yes, you are bang on, Sreeja 🙂
October 27, 2013 10:34 pm|
When I read this , my heart missed a beat, I guessed it but was afraid to pronounce it. But let take a review and spin a sequel albeit a pleasant one.
October 28, 2013 11:14 pm|
Yes, a happy ending is what it should be!
October 27, 2013 10:32 pm|
The unanswered ending leaves a lot to the imagination and why not write a sequel to it.
October 28, 2013 11:16 pm|
Hmmm…. now that’s an idea!
October 28, 2013 12:37 am|
Superb! Superb! The way you narrated the fear was great.
October 28, 2013 11:13 pm|
Thanks Anmol.
October 28, 2013 9:59 am|
Shucks!!! Very well written Shilpa! And very impactful
October 28, 2013 11:17 pm|
Thank you Smita.
October 28, 2013 12:47 pm|
WOW! Shilpa, i could visualize the situation. A brief and clear narration.
October 28, 2013 11:19 pm|
Thank you Asha! Glad you liked this piece of writing!
October 28, 2013 2:31 pm|
such a excellent response for promot Shilpa …… imagine a world where even our home isnt secure!
October 28, 2013 11:20 pm|
Thanks Meena. True, a home which is the mostest safe haven is not safe for many!
October 28, 2013 4:50 pm|
WoW write-up for the prompt…this is what happening in the society and 85% criminals are from within the family
October 28, 2013 11:21 pm|
Yes, they are either family or known to the family. Thank you Amit.
October 28, 2013 5:26 pm|
Gosh!! I was so scared reading this…..
Glad her mom was back in time 🙂
October 28, 2013 11:22 pm|
I know, I am glad she was back just in nick of time, too!
October 28, 2013 8:36 pm|
These words are going to haunt me for a while now. It is sad that this is exactly what some kids might be facing and fearing to talk about.
October 28, 2013 11:23 pm|
True… poor poor babies!! 🙁
October 30, 2013 11:37 am|
Those lines just gave me the creeps…well written. These creeps need to be flogged in public. Congrats on the WOW 🙂
October 30, 2013 1:12 pm|
Absolutely! But sadly, they are never caught and in case they are, they are rarely punished. Thanks Preethi 🙂
November 1, 2013 5:43 pm|
but then that moron would return some other day won’t he? wil her mother arrive on time every single time…I sincerely wish she would…..:(…a simple yet touchy post…hats off Shilpa
November 11, 2013 2:46 pm|
Fingers crossed for the lil one. Hope she tells her mother about it soon!
Thanks C 🙂
November 9, 2013 12:09 am|
aahhh…creative…but true..
November 11, 2013 2:47 pm|
Thanks Latha 🙂