The night was darker, but that didn’t deter him.
Don’t they say, with hard work comes great reward.
The stillness of the early morning, focused him.
While the town was still shaking off the stiffness of a night well-rested, he’d be putting to an end to his life’s struggles by placing that call for ransom!
This is a post written in response to the 55 Word Challenge using the three picture prompts above.
62 Responses
Well narrated in 55 words, unexpected in the end.
Thanks Nibha! Glad you liked this attempt! 🙂
Call for ransom..that’s a spooky one, Shilpa 🙂 But what a tale you weaved in 55 words! Very nice.
Thank you Beloo 🙂
Amazing take on the prompt, Shilpa. Guess the telephone booth was an inspiration for the idea of the ransom in this post.
LOL 😀 You are spot on. I was wondering why would people use a telephone booth these days… and a ransom call was the first thought! 😀
Thanks Vinodini!
He’ll be putting an end to his struggles or invite more struggles?
Destination Infinity
True that! I guess, criminal or twisted minds think and act differently. They are by nature, irresponsible, impulsive, self-centred, and driven by fear and anger, so weighing all the pros and cons of their actions is not on their agenda, may be!
That’s a really imaginative take on the prompt!
Thank you PI. Glad you liked this 55er! 🙂
A dark tale; very well told, Shilpa!
Thank you Uma! 🙂
At the first sentence, I thought maybe he was suicidal. Great how you add a twist & turn in only 55 words!
Thanks a lot, LuAnn. Happy that liked this piece of fiction 🙂
The dark side of a darker night. An easy way to earn money but it is fraught with dangers. A lovely piece of F-55.
Oh yes, the dangers that could jeopardize his whole life! Thank you Kalpana! 🙂
That was good! You have expressed the 3 pics in just 55 words fabulously!
Thank you Pixie. 🙂
Love the narration Shilpa and the mystery behind it:)
Thanks Vishal 🙂
Pretty scary! Are we going to get any more?
Hmmm…. now that’s an idea!! Thanks Carol 🙂
I felt it was more of self-motivation reading the opening lines, the ending stumped me Shilpa
Glad that the 55er achieved its goal. Thanks Reshma! 🙂
Within the limitations you managed to develop a story and end it with a twist…it’s really appreciable…loved reading it!!!
Thanks a lot Sheela for your kind words 🙂
woaa I loved the dark ending. Beautifully done.
Thank you Raj 🙂
nice one! 🙂
Thank you 🙂
His troubles are just beginning 🙂 You have used all three picture prompts beautifully in your post, lovely.
You bet! But then some people act in haste, repent at leisure! 😀
Thank you Sulekha 🙂
nice twist in the end. Well crafted, shilpa!!
Thank you Asha! 🙂
SG, you have an interesting way with words and sentence construction to give an eerie feel in a few sentences than with a voluminous crime thriller.
Thanks a lot, Anil for your encouraging words 🙂
An unexpected end with a twist. An interesting 55er, Shilpa.
Thank you Ma’am 🙂
ohhhhhhhhhh bad man.. os who has he kidnapped to make that ransom.. NOt good
Bikram
Oh yes, he is a bad guy 😀
Typical of your post …unfolds at the end
🙂 🙂
oh! that was quite a twist!! par chor ko bhi hard work karna padta hai!!
Oh yes, mehnat to sabko karni padti hai 😀
Calling for ransom! That is unexpected ending. Thanks.
Thanks SG 🙂
Superb as usual..how do you weave such great fiction in such few words? Superb, really!
Aww! You are so generous, Kajal 🙂
Amazing imagination you have! 🙂
Thank you so much, Rekha 🙂
A dark twist but nicely done for the pictures.
Thank you Suzy 🙂
nice one! Some people want shortcuts or rather they are so tired of constant failures that they stop trusting in hard wok and opt for such crimes.
But then you pay for your misdeeds, sooner or later! 😐
absolutely! the law of karma never fails!
True that! What goes around, comes around 🙂
I’m becoming a fan of your 55 fiction. How beautifully you manage to weave in words 🙂
Thank you Ashwini! 🙂
Nicely done, Shilpa. Good little story in the short word count! Bravo!
Sorry I’ve been negligent of commenting on your blog and others, too. I haven’t even been blogging that much myself. Gotta get back into it.
Thanks Cathy and good to see you here! 🙂
Happy blogging! 🙂
Well done, Shilpa! 🙂 Always so difficult when confined to so few words.
A rather different kind of salvation I must say 😀 Quite a twist!