Salvation
The night was darker, but that didn’t deter him.
Don’t they say, with hard work comes great reward.
The stillness of the early morning, focused him.
While the town was still shaking off the stiffness of a night well-rested, he’d be putting to an end to his life’s struggles by placing that call for ransom!
This is a post written in response to the 55 Word Challenge using the three picture prompts above.
June 16, 2014 5:12 pm|
Well narrated in 55 words, unexpected in the end.
June 17, 2014 10:35 am|
Thanks Nibha! Glad you liked this attempt! 🙂
June 16, 2014 5:16 pm|
Call for ransom..that’s a spooky one, Shilpa 🙂 But what a tale you weaved in 55 words! Very nice.
June 17, 2014 10:36 am|
Thank you Beloo 🙂
June 16, 2014 6:25 pm|
Amazing take on the prompt, Shilpa. Guess the telephone booth was an inspiration for the idea of the ransom in this post.
June 17, 2014 10:37 am|
LOL 😀 You are spot on. I was wondering why would people use a telephone booth these days… and a ransom call was the first thought! 😀
Thanks Vinodini!
June 16, 2014 6:30 pm|
He’ll be putting an end to his struggles or invite more struggles?
Destination Infinity
June 17, 2014 10:43 am|
True that! I guess, criminal or twisted minds think and act differently. They are by nature, irresponsible, impulsive, self-centred, and driven by fear and anger, so weighing all the pros and cons of their actions is not on their agenda, may be!
June 16, 2014 7:01 pm|
That’s a really imaginative take on the prompt!
June 17, 2014 10:44 am|
Thank you PI. Glad you liked this 55er! 🙂
June 16, 2014 7:23 pm|
A dark tale; very well told, Shilpa!
June 17, 2014 10:44 am|
Thank you Uma! 🙂
June 16, 2014 9:11 pm|
At the first sentence, I thought maybe he was suicidal. Great how you add a twist & turn in only 55 words!
June 17, 2014 10:45 am|
Thanks a lot, LuAnn. Happy that liked this piece of fiction 🙂
June 16, 2014 10:17 pm|
The dark side of a darker night. An easy way to earn money but it is fraught with dangers. A lovely piece of F-55.
June 17, 2014 10:51 am|
Oh yes, the dangers that could jeopardize his whole life! Thank you Kalpana! 🙂
June 16, 2014 11:36 pm|
That was good! You have expressed the 3 pics in just 55 words fabulously!
June 17, 2014 10:51 am|
Thank you Pixie. 🙂
June 17, 2014 1:06 am|
Love the narration Shilpa and the mystery behind it:)
June 17, 2014 10:52 am|
Thanks Vishal 🙂
June 17, 2014 3:58 am|
Pretty scary! Are we going to get any more?
June 17, 2014 10:52 am|
Hmmm…. now that’s an idea!! Thanks Carol 🙂
June 17, 2014 4:39 am|
I felt it was more of self-motivation reading the opening lines, the ending stumped me Shilpa
June 17, 2014 10:53 am|
Glad that the 55er achieved its goal. Thanks Reshma! 🙂
June 17, 2014 7:25 am|
Within the limitations you managed to develop a story and end it with a twist…it’s really appreciable…loved reading it!!!
June 17, 2014 10:53 am|
Thanks a lot Sheela for your kind words 🙂
June 17, 2014 10:04 am|
woaa I loved the dark ending. Beautifully done.
June 17, 2014 10:53 am|
Thank you Raj 🙂
June 17, 2014 11:03 am|
nice one! 🙂
June 17, 2014 2:08 pm|
Thank you 🙂
June 17, 2014 1:39 pm|
His troubles are just beginning 🙂 You have used all three picture prompts beautifully in your post, lovely.
June 17, 2014 2:10 pm|
You bet! But then some people act in haste, repent at leisure! 😀
Thank you Sulekha 🙂
June 17, 2014 1:44 pm|
nice twist in the end. Well crafted, shilpa!!
June 17, 2014 2:10 pm|
Thank you Asha! 🙂
June 17, 2014 2:51 pm|
SG, you have an interesting way with words and sentence construction to give an eerie feel in a few sentences than with a voluminous crime thriller.
June 18, 2014 12:31 pm|
Thanks a lot, Anil for your encouraging words 🙂
June 17, 2014 5:02 pm|
An unexpected end with a twist. An interesting 55er, Shilpa.
June 18, 2014 12:31 pm|
Thank you Ma’am 🙂
June 17, 2014 7:54 pm|
ohhhhhhhhhh bad man.. os who has he kidnapped to make that ransom.. NOt good
Bikram
June 18, 2014 12:32 pm|
Oh yes, he is a bad guy 😀
June 17, 2014 8:09 pm|
Typical of your post …unfolds at the end
June 18, 2014 12:32 pm|
🙂 🙂
June 17, 2014 8:26 pm|
oh! that was quite a twist!! par chor ko bhi hard work karna padta hai!!
June 18, 2014 12:33 pm|
Oh yes, mehnat to sabko karni padti hai 😀
June 17, 2014 8:56 pm|
Calling for ransom! That is unexpected ending. Thanks.
June 18, 2014 12:33 pm|
Thanks SG 🙂
June 17, 2014 9:19 pm|
Superb as usual..how do you weave such great fiction in such few words? Superb, really!
June 18, 2014 12:33 pm|
Aww! You are so generous, Kajal 🙂
June 18, 2014 11:58 am|
Amazing imagination you have! 🙂
June 18, 2014 12:34 pm|
Thank you so much, Rekha 🙂
June 18, 2014 2:15 pm|
A dark twist but nicely done for the pictures.
June 18, 2014 2:52 pm|
Thank you Suzy 🙂
June 20, 2014 6:19 pm|
nice one! Some people want shortcuts or rather they are so tired of constant failures that they stop trusting in hard wok and opt for such crimes.
June 20, 2014 9:29 pm|
But then you pay for your misdeeds, sooner or later! 😐
June 20, 2014 10:31 pm|
absolutely! the law of karma never fails!
June 20, 2014 10:33 pm|
True that! What goes around, comes around 🙂
June 20, 2014 11:22 pm|
I’m becoming a fan of your 55 fiction. How beautifully you manage to weave in words 🙂
June 21, 2014 9:24 pm|
Thank you Ashwini! 🙂
June 21, 2014 5:51 pm|
Nicely done, Shilpa. Good little story in the short word count! Bravo!
Sorry I’ve been negligent of commenting on your blog and others, too. I haven’t even been blogging that much myself. Gotta get back into it.
June 21, 2014 9:25 pm|
Thanks Cathy and good to see you here! 🙂
Happy blogging! 🙂
June 22, 2014 10:52 pm|
Well done, Shilpa! 🙂 Always so difficult when confined to so few words.
June 23, 2014 2:23 pm|
A rather different kind of salvation I must say 😀 Quite a twist!