It’s dark and cloudy with rains lashing relentlessly since morning. It’s as if the sky understands my state of mind and is crying with me.
The wind outside is howling and raging, matching the swirling unease of my soul.
As the day drags on, I keep looking at the door… wondering, hoping…
I know, you are not coming back, but I’m not able to stop myself from waiting.
I look out of the window, as another brutal wave of loneliness engulfs me.
Suddenly the reality of being rejected, unwanted and abandoned hits me, just like this house across the street.
Linking this to NaBloPoMo and #FridayFotoFiction
39 Responses
Found your blog through #Friday fortification. Interesting story.The house dies look horribly neglected
Thanks for stopping by, Amrita and taking the time to read. Good to meet you through #FridayFotoFiction 🙂
Oh No! Why this melancholy Shilpa? Vipassana effect?? 😉
LOL NO 😀 This 100 word story is based on this photo prompt. The first thought that I had on seeing this pic was that of an abandoned house and then I linked it to abandonment in relationship.It has got nothing to do with Vipassana 🙂
Oh, poor her. I’ve never read something as tragic as this on your blog. Nevertheless, love the way you’ve rendered it.
Yeah, sad for her. Thanks Vinodini, glad you liked this take on the prompt 🙂
Somehow I feel you really heard that house speaking of that feeling of abandonment, of the rejection. Your words just speak what the house would have liked to speak if it could. Touching writeup, Shilpa!
Thanks a lot for your kind words, Beloo! It made my day! 🙂
Sad, hauntingly beautiful, Shilpa.
I couldn’t decide if it was the house speaking or someone else. Beautiful
Glad that this touched you, Nabanita! Thanks!
Devastating picture. Your words echoing its tragic tale eloquently <3
Yes, the picture speaks a lot!! Thank you, Sulekha, glad you liked this attempt! 🙂
Wow!That was fantastic! Conveyed the pain of a devastated soul very well!Equating that with the abandoned house was awesome!
Thanks a lot, Subha. Glad you liked this piece of writing!
Hi Shilpa,
That is really good.. and that picture oozes of neglect and abandonment ….
Thanks for stopping by and reading this post, Rekha!
This sounds nice 🙂
Thank you, Ashwini! 🙂
That’s a good story and perfect response to the picture prompt. It shows neglect and loneliness.
Thank you, Parul! Glad you liked this story!
That picture killed something inside me. Good lord 🙁
Beautifully translated into a person’s state of affairs and mind. Loved it.
I know what you mean! It speaks a lot of neglect and abandonment both literally and figuratively! Glad you liked this attempt at fiction, Priya!
Very sad.
Yes, it is 😐
You are good with words Shilpa.Loved the story..apt for the prompt. Came to your blog through #fridayfotofiction.
Thanks a lot for your kind words, Deepa and good to meet you through #FridayFotoFiction 🙂
Wow! That house and the way you drew parallels with a person’s dilapdated state of mind..brilliant Shilpa!
Thanks a lot, Deeps! Glad you liked this attempt!
Shilpa, the feeling of being dejected is very well attached to the broken house. Very appropriate choice of words. So much to learn from you
Thank you Geethica. Glad you liked this story in 100 words. 🙂
I want happy endings!!!
Me too…
That’s so sad but beautiful, Shilpa. I feel that emptiness you tried to convey. 🙂
Thanks Shalini! Glad you liked this story!
You are so good at this Shilpa. Brilliant! 🙂
Loved reading this, Shilpa! And the little twist neatly wrapping up the end!
Watch out for the Winner announcement for #FridayFotoFiction Week 2, and the #PhotoPrompt for Week 3 this Thursday.
This is such an evocative post. Your words match that picture perfectly.
Feelings of rejection, abandonment and unwanted is extremely painful; you have captured so well, the picture touched my heart and I could feel the pain too, you are truly blessed to be able to express so perfectly, am glad to be inspired by you.
a melancholic post but how coherently you weave words and relate to that dilapidated home…hmmm….but then i should know it is you, the drabble and 55er queen who is writing.