The Awakening
It’s dark and cloudy with rains lashing relentlessly since morning. It’s as if the sky understands my state of mind and is crying with me.
The wind outside is howling and raging, matching the swirling unease of my soul.
As the day drags on, I keep looking at the door… wondering, hoping…
I know, you are not coming back, but I’m not able to stop myself from waiting.
I look out of the window, as another brutal wave of loneliness engulfs me.
Suddenly the reality of being rejected, unwanted and abandoned hits me, just like this house across the street.
Linking this to NaBloPoMo and #FridayFotoFiction
November 11, 2016 1:17 pm|
Found your blog through #Friday fortification. Interesting story.The house dies look horribly neglected
November 11, 2016 1:52 pm|
Thanks for stopping by, Amrita and taking the time to read. Good to meet you through #FridayFotoFiction 🙂
November 11, 2016 1:44 pm|
Oh No! Why this melancholy Shilpa? Vipassana effect?? 😉
November 11, 2016 1:55 pm|
LOL NO 😀 This 100 word story is based on this photo prompt. The first thought that I had on seeing this pic was that of an abandoned house and then I linked it to abandonment in relationship.It has got nothing to do with Vipassana 🙂
November 11, 2016 1:49 pm|
Oh, poor her. I’ve never read something as tragic as this on your blog. Nevertheless, love the way you’ve rendered it.
November 11, 2016 1:56 pm|
Yeah, sad for her. Thanks Vinodini, glad you liked this take on the prompt 🙂
November 11, 2016 2:06 pm|
Somehow I feel you really heard that house speaking of that feeling of abandonment, of the rejection. Your words just speak what the house would have liked to speak if it could. Touching writeup, Shilpa!
November 12, 2016 7:29 pm|
Thanks a lot for your kind words, Beloo! It made my day! 🙂
November 11, 2016 2:22 pm|
Sad, hauntingly beautiful, Shilpa.
I couldn’t decide if it was the house speaking or someone else. Beautiful
November 12, 2016 7:29 pm|
Glad that this touched you, Nabanita! Thanks!
November 11, 2016 3:31 pm|
Devastating picture. Your words echoing its tragic tale eloquently <3
November 12, 2016 7:30 pm|
Yes, the picture speaks a lot!! Thank you, Sulekha, glad you liked this attempt! 🙂
November 11, 2016 3:35 pm|
Wow!That was fantastic! Conveyed the pain of a devastated soul very well!Equating that with the abandoned house was awesome!
November 12, 2016 7:31 pm|
Thanks a lot, Subha. Glad you liked this piece of writing!
November 11, 2016 4:16 pm|
Hi Shilpa,
That is really good.. and that picture oozes of neglect and abandonment ….
November 12, 2016 7:31 pm|
Thanks for stopping by and reading this post, Rekha!
November 11, 2016 5:11 pm|
This sounds nice 🙂
November 12, 2016 7:32 pm|
Thank you, Ashwini! 🙂
November 11, 2016 6:57 pm|
That’s a good story and perfect response to the picture prompt. It shows neglect and loneliness.
November 12, 2016 7:32 pm|
Thank you, Parul! Glad you liked this story!
November 11, 2016 9:10 pm|
That picture killed something inside me. Good lord 🙁
Beautifully translated into a person’s state of affairs and mind. Loved it.
November 12, 2016 7:35 pm|
I know what you mean! It speaks a lot of neglect and abandonment both literally and figuratively! Glad you liked this attempt at fiction, Priya!
November 11, 2016 11:17 pm|
Very sad.
November 12, 2016 7:36 pm|
Yes, it is 😐
November 11, 2016 11:19 pm|
You are good with words Shilpa.Loved the story..apt for the prompt. Came to your blog through #fridayfotofiction.
November 12, 2016 7:43 pm|
Thanks a lot for your kind words, Deepa and good to meet you through #FridayFotoFiction 🙂
November 12, 2016 1:04 am|
Wow! That house and the way you drew parallels with a person’s dilapdated state of mind..brilliant Shilpa!
November 12, 2016 7:43 pm|
Thanks a lot, Deeps! Glad you liked this attempt!
November 12, 2016 10:49 am|
Shilpa, the feeling of being dejected is very well attached to the broken house. Very appropriate choice of words. So much to learn from you
November 12, 2016 7:44 pm|
Thank you Geethica. Glad you liked this story in 100 words. 🙂
November 12, 2016 1:06 pm|
I want happy endings!!!
November 12, 2016 7:44 pm|
Me too…
November 12, 2016 9:14 pm|
That’s so sad but beautiful, Shilpa. I feel that emptiness you tried to convey. 🙂
November 12, 2016 9:49 pm|
Thanks Shalini! Glad you liked this story!
November 14, 2016 9:41 pm|
You are so good at this Shilpa. Brilliant! 🙂
November 15, 2016 12:30 pm|
Loved reading this, Shilpa! And the little twist neatly wrapping up the end!
Watch out for the Winner announcement for #FridayFotoFiction Week 2, and the #PhotoPrompt for Week 3 this Thursday.
November 15, 2016 6:35 pm|
This is such an evocative post. Your words match that picture perfectly.
November 18, 2016 12:56 pm|
Feelings of rejection, abandonment and unwanted is extremely painful; you have captured so well, the picture touched my heart and I could feel the pain too, you are truly blessed to be able to express so perfectly, am glad to be inspired by you.
November 25, 2016 2:17 pm|
a melancholic post but how coherently you weave words and relate to that dilapidated home…hmmm….but then i should know it is you, the drabble and 55er queen who is writing.