One Too Many
Her heart’s pounding, but she wills herself to gather the courage to say what she has been meaning to say for long.
“I’m asking you to marry me because I love you”, he says, while she’s phrasing the words in her head.
She stares at him stupidly. Her mind is clearly not in sync with her feelings.
“So, what’s your answer?” he whispers.
“Yes” is just a moment away.
His eyes widen a bit in anticipation.
She holds her breath and says “No”, for she’s been let down one too many times to know not to believe in fairy tales.
Linking this to Bar-A-Thon
July 2nd Prompt : One Too Many
July 3, 2018 6:20 pm|
I like this! I always appreciate when a writer can tell an entire story in so few words. There are no throwaway words!
I recently finished editing a collection of 100-word horror stories for Ciofki (he is on Instagram as @gothicktales) and it was so much fun! The wordplay was great.
I’ve been terrible about blog visits lately, but I just wanted to pop by and tell you how much I enjoy your “drabbles.”
July 4, 2018 5:22 pm|
Thank you so much. These words coming from you mean a LOT!
@gothicktalessounds very interesting, will check his stories. Thanks for sharing and dropping by too, Lynda!
July 3, 2018 7:44 pm|
I like this! Fairy tales can be made with more thought than that emotional ‘Yes’.
A good piece of flash fiction there, Shilpa!
July 4, 2018 5:23 pm|
Well said. Thanks Parul!
July 3, 2018 8:32 pm|
Nice twist!
July 4, 2018 5:23 pm|
Thank you, Pam!
July 3, 2018 11:27 pm|
Loved the twist. Bitter truth it is. Such a lovely take on the prompt.
July 4, 2018 5:24 pm|
Thanks a lot, Anami!
July 4, 2018 10:24 am|
ohh….the past shapes the future……
July 4, 2018 5:24 pm|
True that!
July 5, 2018 8:01 am|
Oh that’s unexpected. I wish she dared believe in it one more time and it could have all been real!
July 5, 2018 6:04 pm|
beautiful wordings thanks to sharing
July 5, 2018 10:00 pm|
Nice story told as succinctly as possible.
July 6, 2018 9:04 am|
Wow- this one was so simplistic but packed such a huge punch. Loved it Shilpz
July 7, 2018 9:25 am|
Nice twist,liked the concept.
July 15, 2018 1:21 pm|
Nice, so she took charge of her emotions and started seeing the things as it is rather than what mind perceives. Brilliant writing.