Strangers on a Train
A Drabble is a short work of fiction of precisely one hundred words in length. The purpose of the drabble is brevity, testing the author’s ability to express interesting and meaningful ideas in a confined space.
Oblivious to the chatter in the train, I’m lost in solving mystery along with Detective Fletcher.
Suddenly, I hear this voice. It’s one of those bassy baritones that’s heard on radio.
His voice mesmerizes me.
I try to picture how he’d look.
And there he is, all modelesque but in a timeless manner.
Guess what, he sits across from my seat.
My eyes are restrained by the head, forcing them not to ogle at him.
Is he avoiding me too, I wondered?
We said ‘Bless you’ in unison when a co-passenger sneezed.
Our eyes met.
And we needed no words.
July 9, 2014 8:40 am|
Delicious! I love these mysterious encounters :).
July 9, 2014 9:51 am|
Oh yes, somehow they leave you with that warm fuzzy feeling, isnt it! 🙂
July 9, 2014 8:43 am|
Awww!! that was sweet!
sometimes, we just click, don’t we? With strangers.. who become such important parts of our lives..
July 9, 2014 9:01 am|
Cool! There is something so mysteriously romantic about such encounters on the train 🙂 Nicely penned, Shilpa!
July 9, 2014 9:04 am|
Hoooowwwww cute! I love these kind of rendezvous too 🙂 What a trip this must have been! 😉
July 9, 2014 9:05 am|
The magical meeting of the twain 🙂 Well done, Shilpa 🙂
July 9, 2014 9:15 am|
A mysterious stranger with the deep voice… Sounds delicious.
July 9, 2014 9:17 am|
I definitely need to have more such encounters with mysterious strangers like this. Preferably blonde movie stars too! 🙂
July 9, 2014 9:23 am|
It’s gettin hot in here! 😉 Love this strangers encounter in the train!
July 9, 2014 9:45 am|
This brought to mind that old song “Strangers in the Night, exchanging glances…” I loved this little encounter you captured here. Awesome details and emotion. ♥
July 9, 2014 2:08 pm|
Like Kathy, I was singing “Strangers in the night” too. Oh those wonderful moments.
July 9, 2014 2:37 pm|
The encounter is romantic with a velvet touch of mystery. very well written.
July 9, 2014 3:04 pm|
I had such an encounter once, it was magical.
Short lived, but magical!
July 9, 2014 4:46 pm|
Words weaved into magical lyrics, Shilpa:)
July 9, 2014 6:44 pm|
Oh what a mysterious encounter with Mr. Bassy Baritone!
July 9, 2014 10:40 pm|
Ah…so I know where the inspiration from this lovely piece came from 😉 😉 Some perks of traveling eh?
July 10, 2014 2:05 am|
So romantic!! 😉
July 10, 2014 10:36 am|
no words too from my end for the way you weave the drabbles. how long does it take for you to make a drabble or 55er?. Needless to say shilpa, another feather in your drabble cap.
July 10, 2014 8:33 pm|
SOooo cute!! Such encounters are memorable.
July 10, 2014 8:55 pm|
absolutely yummyyyy 😀
July 11, 2014 2:27 am|
ohho…you can weave a story just from anything. 🙂
July 11, 2014 2:42 am|
Emotions doesn’t need words to convey. Beautiful! 🙂
July 11, 2014 9:53 am|
An impressive stranger with an excellent voice. Cool.
July 11, 2014 12:24 pm|
Very interrsting.. they say a man’s voice can be impress a lot of people around,especially ladies.
Ever noticed force in Amiabh’s voice?
July 11, 2014 1:59 pm|
oooh that sounds romantic 🙂
July 13, 2014 3:09 am|
Loved how you concluded it so beautifully – we needed no words. Subtle and leading 🙂
July 13, 2014 3:59 pm|
Mmmmmm – mystery meeting with a stranger… Me like:-) Yes, sometimes you just click right?
July 15, 2014 4:08 pm|
Is this is the beginning of something new 🙂
October 16, 2019 4:22 pm|
This actually happens so many times that we are temporarily attracted to a stranger and both avoid and then suddenly our eyes lock.
October 16, 2019 6:29 pm|
Oh how sweet and so relatable. 🙂
October 16, 2019 7:40 pm|
Why don’t I meet such interesting people on train? I wonder what happened next. Did they smile?
October 16, 2019 10:14 pm|
October 17, 2019 5:38 am|
Intrigued to read what would have followed! Been a while since I read fiction from you.
October 17, 2019 12:39 pm|
When eyes speak, it indeed is special 🙂
October 17, 2019 3:47 pm|
Ahaa, some mush around there 🙂
October 18, 2019 1:11 am|
Why I never find such kind of co-passengers? What happened next? Am curious.
October 18, 2019 1:30 am|
Loved it, and yes it happens so many times while travelling. ending was really special.
October 18, 2019 12:27 pm|
Love the concept of a drabble , story in 100 words. Your story grabbed my attention till the end. Kudos.
October 18, 2019 10:20 pm|
How come I never meet such interesting people on the train, or on a flight? Maybe because I have my nose in a book as soon as I’ve settled down! 😉
October 19, 2019 6:53 am|
I wish I saw such passengers. the concept of drabble is great, isn’t it?
October 19, 2019 8:25 am|
How many times I have wished for an interesting (ahem) travel meet but its never happened to date 🙁
Loved the way you have set out the story in brevity- feels like a complete tale Shilpa
October 19, 2019 8:34 am|
I myself always talk to people around me while travelling and strangers become friends nice post Shilpa well written.
October 19, 2019 10:30 am|
Train is a place to have such short term relations initiated by eyes. Curious to know what happened next. 🙂
October 19, 2019 7:44 pm|
Hmm.Haven’t we all met the love of our lives in similar ways ?Few very romantic 100 words !
October 19, 2019 10:59 pm|
Short crisp story that keeps me hooked till end. Very well Penned
October 19, 2019 11:16 pm|
Perfect 100 words story. I love it. I am also a big fan of writing 100 words stories and poem. Concise yet Chrisp. Well Done.
October 19, 2019 11:21 pm|
Such a nice concept I hardly meet such strangers while traveling in the train as I always keep reading a book or checking out my phone.
October 20, 2019 8:02 am|
Instant connection of sorts, isn’t it? Eye contact is an interesting thing and works even with strangers. That person sneezing sealed the deal.
October 20, 2019 9:50 am|
This is a situation perhaps most of us have encountered at some point of time. It actually is quitea thrilling experience.
October 20, 2019 9:58 am|
Such a lovely little tale…
October 20, 2019 10:23 am|
Very well written. Conveying a story in lesser words in not easy. Keep writing.
October 20, 2019 11:16 am|
Same thing happened with my friend and her love story started. Now they both are married and have a kid too.
October 20, 2019 12:22 pm|
Such an intriguing piece shilpa, so excited to know what happen next, do they meet again, fell in love.. . Keep writing, you are magical with words