Friday’s 55 Fiction : Caught In Her Own Web?
55 Fiction is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.
Caught In Her Own Web?
Narrow crowded by-lanes are always a sight. The vehicles honking incessantly; the hawkers shouting, trying to outdo each other; women haggling with the vendors, children eyeing the toys, greedily… she observed nonchalantly.
Listlessly, she bought a few things and rushed out. “Perfect!” she smirked.
“Madam, your bag”…said the panting boy.
And the bomb exploded.
July 31, 2009 9:01 am|
Good one..u becoming an expert
July 31, 2009 9:42 am|
Oh..
55 Fiction is like 20 20 cricket… Short mai Niptae.. 😛
July 31, 2009 9:47 am|
Wow.
Great talent you are.
Ending is totally “bolt from the blue”.
Good job.
July 31, 2009 10:39 am|
I couldn’t help laughing!
But an excellent one!
July 31, 2009 11:16 am|
Wow! Kya “dhamakedaar” ending hai…!!!
July 31, 2009 2:34 pm|
oopss…superb!!!
July 31, 2009 3:37 pm|
SUPERB.. gr8 idea, gr8er execution.. definitely ur best post i’v read till now.. its like yuvi scoring 6 sixes in an ovr in a T20 match:)
July 31, 2009 3:42 pm|
this post desrves anothr comment.. i read it some hours ago bt cudnt cmmnt as my net cnnction wnt down.. however, evn aftr cuming back nd reading it again, the reaction is same.. i havnt read many 55ers bt um sure evn if i hd read 100 of thm this wud hav been d best:)
One request.. the wrds hav exceeded 2 56(yup i alwez count thm), u mite remove ‘kites’ to make it xact 55:)
July 31, 2009 5:01 pm|
Reminded me of a Telugu movie named ‘Majnu’ wherein the movie ends in the same way you wrote!
But its very electrifying! Your post I mean!
August 1, 2009 11:57 am|
haha! reading such stories is always a pleasure! post some more please…and visit my blog some day
August 1, 2009 4:24 pm|
That was gr8 !!! never guessed the ending … very nice
August 1, 2009 8:07 pm|
@ ALL : Thank you guys and gals!!
Your feedback is truly motivating!!
And I am one happy blogger!!
Thank YOU!! 🙂
@ Vipul: I don’t know, Microsoft word count showed it to be 55, but when I counted it manually (or is it mentally!), it was 56!
So deleted the kites, as suggested.
Thank a lot for your feedback! 🙂
August 2, 2009 7:29 pm|
Beautiful post Shilpa. So this time you decided to let the readers know the end of the story..eh?!
August 3, 2009 4:19 am|
VERY, VERY Nice!! I loved the tension of this.
I do 55 fiction and flash fiction myself, so I’m already an afficionado!
Ranee
August 3, 2009 7:35 am|
@ Amrit: Thanks Amrit. Yeah, though the feedback given in the last 55 fiction was a need for a happy ending…but could manage this!! 🙂
@ PEOPLE, PLACES, VOICES, FACES…: Am happy you liked it! Will check out your 55 Fiction too!!
August 5, 2009 1:54 pm|
A haiku on ur 55 fiction!
“she came out and the boy followed with the bag – explosion”
this happens to be my first main stream Haiku, so please feel free to comment! 😀
August 5, 2009 2:30 pm|
@ pawan: A good one, Pawan! 🙂
Came to know about Haiku at Ranee’s blog.
Read some articles abt it. Thought of trying it…but didn’t!!
August 5, 2009 4:20 pm|
gud one!!!!!!!!!!1 short but big enuf to understand the picture behind it!!!!! come up with some more such blogs
August 5, 2009 5:19 pm|
@ Sumeet: Thanks! Hmm…that’s the idea behind 55 Fiction. Apart from that, there should be an element of Drama, Suspense and Shock!!
August 30, 2009 4:24 pm|
Kaboom! This was great 🙂
I am your competitor at Indiblogger 😛 but your are leading 😀
August 31, 2009 8:13 am|
@ Sangfroid: Thanks!!
You are leading, and the voting is gonna end soon!!
Congratulations!! 🙂
September 28, 2009 9:39 pm|
OK. WOW.
Really Cool!
Keep it up! 🙂
March 23, 2010 12:51 pm|
Hey its very nice. 🙂
Well! I’d voted even before reading it…it was a right decision. 🙂
March 23, 2010 4:32 pm|
Already voted. Its a great 55er
March 23, 2010 4:59 pm|
Nothing short of awesome!Great goin’!
March 24, 2010 6:03 am|
Short,crisp and to the point.
CONGRATS.
March 24, 2010 1:24 pm|
The last four words twisted everything! Like the post…
March 25, 2010 2:06 pm|
wonderful!
voted for you!!
May 3, 2010 1:33 pm|
Very very creative!!
I am new to blogging….. where can i vote for u?
May 3, 2010 1:41 pm|
@ All : Thank you friends for your feedback and support!!
@ Abha : Thanks Abha and welcome on A Rose is a Rose is a Rose!!
Well, the voting is over!! And I won too! 🙂