Friday’s 55 Fiction : The Pain
55 Fiction is a form of micro-fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.
The Pain
“Aaah! Please…. leave me…I can’t bear it…. You are hurting me!!”
“Quiet!! I had warned you. I have waited for this, way too long. I should have done it earlier.”
“God! Help me, please. I can’t take it anymore.”
“You will. There is no escape now.”
Aaaaaaaaah……….
“It’s done. Want to see your rotten tooth?”
April 16, 2010 7:27 pm|
I realized that I’m quite dirty minded. 😛
By the way, nice story. 🙂
April 16, 2010 7:33 pm|
lol. good one!
April 16, 2010 8:50 pm|
Nicely done 🙂
April 16, 2010 11:51 pm|
A painful twist to a nice story 🙂
April 17, 2010 1:11 am|
🙂 good one!
April 17, 2010 3:09 am|
LOL …. gud one 🙂
April 17, 2010 4:29 am|
semantics of 55 fic are aptly stiched… 🙂
April 17, 2010 4:57 am|
It normally doesnt happen to me, but this time I did think of dirt
April 17, 2010 6:25 am|
told ya na, your presentation is superb :))
April 17, 2010 7:12 am|
Ouch! A rotten teeth 😀 ….good twist…
April 17, 2010 8:06 am|
Ooh nice twist.I thought maybe it was someone applying some disinfectant over someone else’s wound thereby generating such a reaction.But a rotten tooth also fit the bill.Good one :))
April 17, 2010 8:35 am|
a really nice twist at the end.. 🙂
April 17, 2010 11:37 am|
OMG…too good…..but to tell u ..i was thinking of the tooth only…;-)
April 17, 2010 4:39 pm|
I have a school friend who is now a dentist. I should call him and narrate your 55r.
Good one.
🙂
April 17, 2010 5:44 pm|
The plot is familiar… had read it in a form of an email forward.. But you have beautifully managed to mould it into a 55 fiction! Good Work Shilpa!
April 17, 2010 6:14 pm|
eeeks….my tooth pained on reading the article…:P
and so did my stomach…rofl…:P
April 17, 2010 6:34 pm|
nice one :p
April 18, 2010 8:11 am|
Heehee 😛
I knew something funny was in store at the end but did not think it would be a dental story 😛
April 18, 2010 11:13 am|
lol…enjoyed reading!
April 18, 2010 4:47 pm|
i am bad or u are dirty
April 18, 2010 4:48 pm|
love to see more ..follow!! follow!!
April 18, 2010 5:46 pm|
hehe 🙂
Good one!!
April 19, 2010 2:40 am|
LOL Shilpa..just perfect post before starting my week(toothy)…hee !!Good one:))
April 20, 2010 2:50 pm|
Awwwsummm Shilpaa!!!!! You just get better and better.
April 24, 2010 2:45 pm|
Well, my dirty mind went to work straight away 😀
April 28, 2010 8:36 am|
lol… i thought dirty at the same time i thought it wont be so …
good one….