UBC Day 17 : The Story Continues…
Today’s Wednesday Write Tribe prompt is to conclude both or one of these stories.
- Varsha Bagadia’s ‘A Moment of Happiness’
- Patrick O’Scheen’s ‘Proud Child’
I chose Varsha’s ‘A Moment of Happiness’. Read her story first and then check out my attempt to conclude her story.
The police officer disappointed him.
Unlike the other ‘followers’ who allowed him to savour fear or horror in their eyes, the officer showed just some confusion.
The first blow was fatal enough and the second was uncalled for, but he couldn’t take any chances.
The officer with his investigations could put his mission on a back burner.
He chuckled to note that the officer came across as a bonus, but he still needed 4 more ‘followers’ in the next 2 days.
He can’t let his master down, the powerful ‘ Angel of Light’ who directed him through his neighbour’s dog.
This is in response to the Write Tribe Prompt – Continue The Story
July 17, 2013 4:02 pm|
Hi Shilpa . This story is very absorbing. You have said so much in a limited number of words.Great !
July 18, 2013 11:56 am|
Thanks a lot, Ma’am for your kind words 🙂
July 17, 2013 4:04 pm|
gosh!
July 18, 2013 11:56 am|
😀
July 17, 2013 4:16 pm|
Wow!!! That was quick and superb 😀
The Angel Of Light is a new name learnt… thank you Shilpa 🙂
July 18, 2013 11:57 am|
Glad you liked it, Bhavya 🙂
July 17, 2013 8:57 pm|
my god! u must seriously write fiction…….ur visualisation is so good!
July 18, 2013 11:58 am|
Thanks LP, coming from you, it is huge. 😛
July 17, 2013 10:10 pm|
that was so cool SHilpa 😀
July 18, 2013 11:58 am|
Thanks D 🙂
July 17, 2013 11:42 pm|
While Varsha’s story moved fast like a thriller, your’s is short and chilling… Brilliant icing on a lovely cake type 🙂
July 18, 2013 7:32 am|
Excellent Shilpa…this pierces through so quickly…Nice fiction!
July 18, 2013 11:59 am|
Glad you enjoyed reading this one, Kajal 🙂
July 18, 2013 7:49 am|
Awesome ending, well done!
July 18, 2013 11:59 am|
Thank you, Kathy 🙂
July 18, 2013 9:45 am|
Wow!
The ending fits very well!!
beautiful writing Shilpa! 🙂
July 18, 2013 11:59 am|
Thanks for your feedback, Pixie 🙂
July 18, 2013 10:27 am|
You managed to bring the story to a fitting conclusion. Great story.
July 18, 2013 12:00 pm|
Thank you so much, Cynthia 🙂
July 18, 2013 11:52 am|
OMG! To conclude another’s persons story in a short span of time and that too within 100 words……Take a bow, Shilpa:)
July 18, 2013 12:00 pm|
😛 Thank you Asha. You are too generous 🙂
July 18, 2013 1:17 pm|
You have a cinema playing in fron of you or what O_O .. how easily you write up a story ya… really good 🙂
July 18, 2013 8:27 pm|
You think so??!! 😛
Thanks Sunita 🙂
July 18, 2013 7:20 pm|
honestly with the hustle bustle I havent been able to read the two stories. So I don’t know what was the end or something but what you have written I could sense that the person “he” is a murderer. Rest I will read and come back 😀 😀
July 18, 2013 8:27 pm|
Oh, take your time! 🙂
December 24, 2013 7:32 am|
Llevarán una gran cantidad de MM sección largo invierno de la chaqueta negro, la forma de vestir sentido de la moda la ropa vino, como su vestido de suéter rojo dentro del paseo, cálido y muy bien parecido, vestido de estilo retro está muy de moda, y luego seleccione con las botas , muy caliente en el invierno con un temperamento notable.