Her heart raced uncontrollably.
Her stomach churned with fear.
Her eyes looked far and wide.
A bead of sweat started forming on her brow.
And then she heaved a sigh of relief when she spotted her object of desire.
Life’s not easy when you have a hyperactive child to babysit and tyrant of a mistress.
This is a Fiction written for Write Tribe’s Wednesday Prompt which is Photo Prompt shown above.
Linking it to January 2014 Ultimate Blog Challenge and NaBloPoMo
To read posts by fellow friends and UBC and NaBloPoMo participants, click hereJairam,Kajal, Kathy, Michelle, Nabanita, Richa, Suzy Que, Sheethal. Yes, we can do we with some more cheering and support.
78 Responses
And that’s the fastest response I’ve seen to a prompt!
Great job, Shilpa!
I saw the pic and wrote immediately about the first thought that crossed my mind!
ha ha …dats sweet … hyperactive kids really take u for a ride..dats another thing that you enjoy every bit of it
Oh yes, handling hyperactive kids can be really challenging! And yes, it’s enjoyable when you sit back and reminisce.
Woman (And I mean that with utmost respect) – Will you never cease to amaze me? The fastest response I’ve seen and just amazing. Shilpa…..uff..words fail me!
And your wonderful comments always bring a smile!!
Brilliant, Shilpa. It’s always hard when you’re a baby sitter!
True and especially if you have to take care of a super active child
That’s my baby’s story when she was 2 or 3..I guess
Oh wow! And how was it for you?
Tee hee such a nice take! And something which is so funny and true
You bet!!
WOW, amazing take on the prompt. That inspiration hit you like a bolt of lightning and you in turn created a masterpiece! Well done! ♥
Thanks a lot, Kathy! ♥
OMG!! That was probably the quickest response to a prompt I’ve ever seen. And that kid must keep the baby sitter’s hands full
Sometimes you get lucky!!
Oh yes, I can empathize with the baby sitter!
That was quick and a great one on the prompt Shilpa
It was my lucky day, Nabanita! Thanks
wow! That was brilliant!!
Tyrant mistresses are such a pain!
You have captured those feelings really well
Oh yes, they really know to make one’s life truly miserable!
Thanks Pixie, glad you enjoyed this 55er!
Haha Too Good. I’ve seen similar things happen, right in front of my eyes and I had to go around trying to find the other shoe of my 6 month old nephew
Oh, you just have to wait to be a mother. Then everybody (kids and husband too) would be coming to you for their lost things (cant find/see things) and you’ll be able to find them effortlessly for them!
too good!
Thanks Hitchy
Beautifully penned Shilpa:)
Thks Mr Bhatia
I have one hyperactive girl at home, and I could so well relate to this one.
Oh! Hyperactive kids can keep you on your toes!
Wow! I should never have thought of that in response to the pic prompt! Innovative, aren’t you?
Thanks!
True, it is a everyday battle to find the lost things for the family, that way moms of grown up children like me also end up as google looking for that misplaced book, project papers, sometimes even pencil, rubber etc.,. As always a beautiful 55er.
Agree with what you said, Asha. It is weird that my boys cant see things which are lying right in front of them!! Thanks
Nice take on the prompt Shilpa. Watching a kid keeps one’s hands full, mind hyper alert and body fit
Well said!! Now that I am past the stage of handling hyperactive kids, I really feel for the young mothers now!!
Shilpa that was Superb! and all your posts are.. I have not commented on many of your posts recently.. but I have read all and liked them which actually means that I wanted to comment “Shilpa, You are an awesome writer” but didn’t want to be repetitive and you to feel I am simple copy – pasting my comment
But I actually feel the same on each and every fiction/post you write “you are awesome”
Awwie Seena!! I am speechless!
Thank you so much for the encouragement and kind words. They mean a lot
A beautiful prompt as always. I am starting to check if you posted a prompt before checking writetribe
Thanks Siva! LOL What does your investigation report say?
Amazing 55er ! Shilpa you always have brilliant ideas.
Thank you so much Ma’am
Such a cute take on the prompt. My mind went in the opposite direction
Thanks Sulekha
Ha ha! A hyperactive kid with a tyrant of a mistress…. good for the babysitter that she found the shoe.
I know, otherwise hell would break loose!!
Brilliant Shilpa! Her feelings so well conveyed in just 55 words!!
Thanks Aditi!
That’s a brilliant write up Shilpa!
Thanks Anu
A quick yet a beautiful take on the prompt.
Thank you Sheethal
very prompt response on the prompt,
i am a recent contributor to write tribe and i love your posts
Thanks Sitara and welcome to my blog
Will check out your post soon
LOL! That’s a good one!! I thought something tragic was about to take place!
Gotcha!!
wow you came up with the story like in a flash awesome
Thank you Raj
I think you have some inside information on the prompts. Arrre… even before the prompt is up you’re done. Some of you must rub off on me — at least I wasn’t among the last few this time.
And relieved for the babysitter. Wouldn’t like to be in her place.
Ah! You doubt my creative abilities T
I know, poor girl would have had a tough time if the shoe was missing!
You are excellent with these 55ers. Fantastic handling of prompt. Very innovative!
Thanks a lot, Rachna
It keeps happening in our house, where our dogs are always crazy about shoes and slippers lying around. I have to always watch for one of them will run away with just one slipper or shoe and when it is found it would be in tatters. Naughty children and naughty dogs, they are all the same.
Nice topic.
Gosh!! Why do they love shoes?? Our earlier pet, pepper, he has damaged so many pairs too.
Superbly done. Nice take on the prompt.
Thank you Suzy
Ah, yes, Shilpa…and that shoe’s all over the place!
Oh yes!! All around the blogosphere
Wow, Few words but they communicated every background in your shortest story
Thanks Poornima
over active kids, I tell you
Aah! You bet!!
You are so good at writing Fiction 55 and I struggle to strive within a word limit of even 500 words Good one Shilpa
Thanks Prasanna! Practice and patience is the key
I loved the way you portrayed things. You are a writer in making.
Aww! You are too kind Sunil! Thanks
A perfect story in just 55 words! Too good!
Thanks Payal
It’s an absolutely brilliant take, Shilpa, and so sweet:)
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Thank you Vishal. Glad you liked it