Breach
Stirring slowly, she opened her eyes taking in the unfamiliar surroundings.
She looked around but her mind was too groggy.
She tried to get up, but felt stiff all over.
She could feel it in her bones that something terrible had happened to her
She shouted but the voice she heard was no louder than a rat’s squeak.
And then the stench of urine that had fermented the whole night hit her.
Hot tears welled up in her eyes as the last she remembered was entering this beautiful room at the resort and drinking something that her boyfriend gave her.
Linking it to Write Tribe’s 100 Words on Saturday : Picture Prompt
May 25, 2014 5:47 pm|
What a terrible thing to happen to any young girl!
Quite a meaningful take on the picture prompt. I like it 🙂
May 25, 2014 8:00 pm|
Oh yes, such a nightmare that will last for a long long time. Thanks Beloo. Glad you liked this attempt! 🙂
May 25, 2014 6:05 pm|
Sad story, nicely expressed.
At least she’s not killed, but has to live with the trauma for a lifetime… Really wish all this never happened.
May 25, 2014 8:02 pm|
May this never happen to anybody, ever!
May 25, 2014 6:26 pm|
A nightmare for her…terrible experience. Great story writing, I had written a similar one some time back.
May 25, 2014 8:04 pm|
Truly tragic and terrible indeed! Thank Sulekha. Will check out your story too. Can you share the link pls! Thanks 🙂
May 27, 2014 7:29 pm|
Here it is, the link to my story 🙂
http://sulekharawat.com/2013/03/01/betrayed/
May 28, 2014 1:50 pm|
Thank you Sulekha. What a scary thing to happen! 😐
May 25, 2014 6:52 pm|
What a terrible nightmare ! Her partner is absconding leaving her in this terrible state.
May 25, 2014 8:04 pm|
May be, he is the one responsible for this state of hers! 🙁
May 25, 2014 6:58 pm|
Oh! It’s scary and terrible what happened to the young girl. The guy’s a maniac! Beautifully churned and written in a crisp way as you hold ur readers in sway. Well done, Shilpa:)
May 25, 2014 8:06 pm|
Oh yes, we have such kinds around us!
Thanks Vishal.
May 25, 2014 7:16 pm|
Ah Shilpa, what a sad story. Touches the heart!
May 25, 2014 8:06 pm|
Glad you liked this attempt, Ma’am!
May 25, 2014 8:11 pm|
A very terrible morning to go through for anyone.. May strength be with her…
May 25, 2014 8:26 pm|
🙁 Amen to that!
May 25, 2014 8:53 pm|
Life can b so cruel sometimes… 🙁
May 28, 2014 1:24 pm|
Sadly, yes!! 🙁
May 26, 2014 2:06 am|
Oh, poor girl! 🙁
May 28, 2014 1:24 pm|
🙁
May 26, 2014 4:20 am|
Pretty picture and a contrary sad story. Girls are vulnerable aren’t they
May 28, 2014 1:25 pm|
Oh, they are! Wish no girl ever falls in such a trap!
May 26, 2014 2:49 pm|
This gave me the jitters …
May 28, 2014 1:27 pm|
I can understand, after all this is such am awful thing to happen to anybody!
May 26, 2014 3:18 pm|
So the pretty bed hides a dark secret. Well done, Shilpa. Loved the title of the post. I didn’t guess it at all 🙂
May 28, 2014 1:29 pm|
Oh yes, like they say all that glisters is not gold! Thanks Shailaja. Glad that you liked this attempt! 🙂
May 26, 2014 5:11 pm|
and I was thinking such a colorful and lively picture!!!
harsh reality indeed….
May 28, 2014 1:30 pm|
A horrible reality…. 🙁
May 26, 2014 5:45 pm|
This keeps on happening each day with numerous young souls who trust people for what they are not 🙁 Amazing take on the prompt 🙂
May 28, 2014 1:31 pm|
Oh yes, this breach of trust by known people is not uncommon! And so many people are victimized.
Thanks Sushree! 🙂
May 26, 2014 6:41 pm|
A powerful take on the prompt….This should not happen to anyone..
May 28, 2014 1:32 pm|
True that! Thanks Jayanta!
May 26, 2014 7:48 pm|
Such a terrible thing to happen to a young girl and the memory would haunt her forever.
May 28, 2014 1:32 pm|
Yes, and the emotional scars of which would last a lifetime!
May 27, 2014 12:02 am|
that’s such a sharp contrast…. and u’ve used pink so well, a colour so feminine, and soft…with something so beastly and rough. well done!
May 28, 2014 1:34 pm|
Well, the story is in response to this picture prompt! Glad you liked this piece of writing, Shubhangi
May 27, 2014 2:59 am|
Powerfully written, but such a sad story. It’s all too real for too many young girls.
May 28, 2014 1:35 pm|
Yes, a sad and tragic reality for many girls! 🙁
May 27, 2014 9:09 am|
Very sad. Terrible experience.
May 28, 2014 1:35 pm|
🙁
May 27, 2014 11:45 am|
I like it,but,its too sad.There is a msg in this.
In our society,such creeps do exist.
May 28, 2014 1:36 pm|
Wish such things simply vanish from our society!
May 27, 2014 1:21 pm|
That’s terrible…but not all that uncommon I suppose. Great take on the prompt Shilpa!
May 28, 2014 1:37 pm|
Yeah, we keep hearing of such mishaps in the media! Thanks PB!
May 27, 2014 3:40 pm|
So dreadful story!! I hope she recovers from that nightmare very soon.. 🙁
May 28, 2014 1:37 pm|
Hope she does! While the physical scars may heal, the mental scars may take a long long time to heal!
May 27, 2014 3:48 pm|
OH NOoooooo.. that is disgusting ..
but it has become very common here too now .. saturday nights see a lot of this going on .. sad sad
Bikram
May 28, 2014 1:39 pm|
Hope girls are more cautious and learn to listen to their inner voice too!
May 27, 2014 7:17 pm|
ohh god that’s terrible. A pretty picture but grim tale.
May 28, 2014 1:39 pm|
I know, but it is a harsh reality of the times we live in!
May 27, 2014 11:02 pm|
Life can be so cruel at times.
Unfortunately, such incidents are on the increase in our society.
You handled a sensitive topic very well.
May 28, 2014 1:40 pm|
A sad and a grim reality of our society! Thanks Huma.
May 28, 2014 4:11 am|
Young minds are so easily lured into traps that promise love and better life. When truth hits them, it is too late… Wonderfully narrated Shilpa!!
May 28, 2014 1:42 pm|
At times like these rationality, caution and sanity are thrown out of the window. And one can only regret and repent later. Thank you Reshma!
May 28, 2014 12:02 pm|
Oh 🙁
That’s sad. I wonder how he could misuse her trust.
Well, anything can happen in this world.
May strength be with her !
May 28, 2014 1:43 pm|
Oh there are all kind of people in this world, who have no qualms in using and manipulating and destroying people! 😐
May 29, 2014 1:37 pm|
This is really scary! How can someone so close do something like this? Wonder how…
June 11, 2014 9:43 pm|
Only callous demented people can do such things!
May 31, 2014 12:25 am|
Ah, pretty much a story happening these days. Sigh! Just one of the many forms of cruelties being borne by women. Well written 🙂
June 11, 2014 9:44 pm|
Sad reality! 😐
Thanks Jyotsna!
May 31, 2014 3:58 pm|
Oh dear the poor girl. This is probably a reality for some though.
June 11, 2014 9:44 pm|
True that! 🙁
June 1, 2014 9:56 pm|
Looking at the picture I thought there’ll be some twist. But very well written. Such a sad state for many people.
June 11, 2014 9:46 pm|
Really heart wrenching! 🙁
June 2, 2014 8:06 pm|
oh no…Every girl needs to be so cautious about what is happening with them..good twist at the end..
June 11, 2014 9:47 pm|
True, in times like today, one should be very careful and should not trust blindly! Thanks P!
June 9, 2014 11:28 am|
Really nice Shilpa, you have shown the reality….such date-rape crimes have become really common these days. The description was touching and made the entire trauma come out real.
June 11, 2014 9:48 pm|
Thanks Ankita!