Their hatred towards each other was mutual and burnt as strong as ever!
They chose to fight it out to settle things once and for all.
They fought fiercely and unwaveringly for long till one fell.
He danced and rejoiced while celebrating his victory and stumbled to his death down a steep flight of stairs
Linking this to BAR-A-THON by Blog-A-Rhythm Day 1 Prompt – Stranger than Fiction
70 Responses
If only…..LOL
Yeah, if only, they both had forgiven and forgotten!
Oh! Oh! Talk about a Pyrrhic victory! Love the 55, Shilpa!
True that! He had to pay a heavy price for that victory! Thank you so much, Vidya! So glad that you liked this 55er 🙂
Ohh dear that didn’t go well. Nice twist at the end.
Yeah! Sadly! Thanks Raj, glad you liked the twist!
You’re still spinning these short tales with so much finesse. The ending was truly unexpected.
LOL… still doing that! Thanks for your kind words, Vinodini!
Kool. Dramati ending.
Thank you, SG!
I love your 55ers. The message so well conveyed. I guess when 2 people are consumed by hatred for each other, the destruction of one leads to the destruction of the other in most cases.
Thanks a lot, Rachna! You made my day! 🙂
Well said, hatred is that destructive energy that pulls down whosoever comes in contact with it!
That’s what happens always, isn’t it? One goes down and pulls the other along! So much in just 55 words! Bravo!
True that! Yeah, it’s like the domino effect! Just as darkness cannot drive out darkness; only light can do that, similarly hate cannot drive out hate! Thank you, Shilpa. Glad you liked this 55 fiction!
Oh. The desire to win all the time.
Good one, Shilpa!
Yeah, at any cost too! Thank you, Tarang. Glad you liked this story in 55 words!
Ah! Twist in the end! Seems like a hidden lesson there! A fight doesn’t do anyone any good!
Well said, Fighting or hating makes both the parties miserable, and often has devastating and negative effect that affects all areas of life. Thank you, Nibha, glad you liked the twist ending!
The human ego brings destruction and boost false pride. You’ve expressed it with so much power, Shilpa.
Thanks a lot, Vishal! Glad you liked this 55er!
Lol.. Didn’t see that coming in the end!
Wonderfully portrayed in just 55 words!
Cheers
Thanks Geetika. Glad you liked it!
Great twist! The other one could have very well been a mother, no?
A mother? Hmmm…. that adds a new perspective to it. I had not thought of a mother but two warriors!
Thanks Shubhangi. Glad you liked the twist ending!
So sad nah… when people just live to win and lose in the midway.
True… such a waste of life!
Did he fall accidentally or intentionally ?
I am sure accidentally. 🙂
Oops that’s too bad. They should have just sorted their differences.
Yeah and that would have made a difference!
Ouch!! Well, they could have just sorted out their difference…his loss, I suppose 😉
Yeah, they could have but they didn’t sadly! And eventually, both lost!
Violence never did any one good, did it? You have to pay for your deeds, one way or the other! Great take on the prompt Shilpa.
Oh yes, karma serves you in this very life!
Thanks Kala, glad you liked this 55er.
Ouch! Didn’t expect the twist. Great one, Shilpa!
Thanks Uma. Glad you enjoyed reading this one!
I love your 55ers and I know this is just a start.
Awesome. If only they could talk it out….
You are too generous, Shalini. Thanks.
Yes, communication is the key, but more often than not, we dont use this tool!
Yikes. A victory and joy short lived. You are the queen of the 55s
Sadly, and such a waste too!
Thanks Suzy, you are too kind!
Oh dear! Victory gone in vain. This is true for all the wars. There is just loss on both sides.
True. Each war is different, and yet each war is the same. It is such a waste of human life and resources too!
Sad truth, ego does so much damage. They just lost it all!
Well said, Shilpa.
Yes, they lost it all!! Thanks Inderpreet!
Do you have some sort of ‘verbal cookie cutter’ that correctly helps you end stories brilliantly at 55 words?? 😀
I mean, I watch you do it on and on every month and it is so easy for you … I would not be able to say my name without needing a 100 words explaining myself, I reckon 🙂
Aah! Wish I had that. 😀
It does not come so easily to me, like others, so I try a bit more harder. Thanks for your kind words, you are so generous, Roshan! Long stories (and getting published!) are your forte and you weave them so beautifully and how!!
A superb 55 fiction here 🙂 They fought, and am not sure about forgiveness, but were sure forgotten 😀
Liked your perspective. Thanks Shanx, glad you enjoyed reading this 55 fiction!
Lol! I liked the twist at the end. If only he had forgiven and forgotten.
Yes, if only…
Thanks Ramya!
Loved how you have weaved a story in just 55 words. Well, evil always has a bad end. A little bit of understanding would have saved both their lives.
True, but when hatred blinds our eyes, sanity takes leave!
Thanks Reema, glad you liked this story in 55 words!
I’m in the midst of a Game of Thrones reading spree. And this whole 55 word story just sums up the entire experience of life: you think you’ve won, but in reality there’s something awaiting you next.
Keep them stories coming, my favourite flash-fiction- under-55-words writer 😀
You are reading GoT! I have to pick it up too!!
Thanks Mithila, glad you could relate this so well to our web of life. Thank you so much for your support! 🙂
Well, I bet he didn’t see that one coming. Pun intended. 😉
Oh yes, he didnt see it coming at all! 😀
U turn at the end!!! He deserves it btw!!! Beautifully written
You bet! Thanks Madhavi!
Gosh! so much for fighting and causing harm. 55 is fun, Shilpa.
All a waste, sadly!
Thanks Parul!
Divine justice. Short-lived victory…
Well expressed, Shilpa!
True that! Thanks Anita!
Wish people realized sooner than later….You put across a strong message in very few words Shilpa.
Thanks Sunaina. Glad you liked it!
Justice gets served if not by man by destiny! Nice piece of work Shilpa as always
Oh yes, in Karma cafe, you get served what you deserve. Thanks for your kind words, Jayashree!
love the way you incorporate philosophy into 55 words…this is a beautiful art Shilpa…you surely are a short fiction queen…btw…that was really a sad story. Did’nt do any good to either of the two.
Yes, hatred kills both the parties from inside. Thank you, Asha for your kind words.
You totally rock these 55ers, Shilpa. 🙂
I am just trying… Thanks Shantala!